Suffering.

[JosiahJudgement]

Eh quickly wrote like the rest - this one in about 10 mins.
Criticism, blehness? etc. thanks!


Break in your mind
Never believe in me.
What this world is
and what we shall see.
Life is unfaithful,
it's just beating me
Wrapped in the covers,
I am cold as can be.

Don't waste your time.
I'll be of no use.
I will cut your throat,
you'll hang from a noose.
You hearts on the floor,
your veins all cut loose.
I told you to leave.
..They never follow through.

I am a monster,
they call me a freak.
But soon through it all
my name they will speak.
Run them all down,
make them all weak.
They feel the pain,
yet I am suffering.

[lew_1987]

Don't waste your time.
I'll be of no use.
I will cut your throat,
you'll hang from a noose.
You hearts on the floor,
your veins all cut loose.

That bit was really terrible, but the rest of it actually has potential. Work on finding new ways to say what you want to say.

[datsdniv]

if its good or not i dont know,but i certainly will remember parts of it quite some time:)