Unknowingly, I Said Goodbye

[Idlewarrior]

I know this idea has been given to
People from places hard to see
And out of reach, Over seas

But I want to show my hands
Working strong to build a monument
In memory of my parents, who're undressed
Conceiving me in the heat of prestige
And depressing standards of embodiments of hell

But my feet they just take up space
Breaking rocks and evidently
Keeping things to themselves
If I could write half as well
As the devil made that place
Would I fade to die away

I remember the way it was displayed
A mark of sin, and a label
Gift of shit, Daddy's little angel
Go get a grip and fight the Consulate

If you want me to be like you
then say something before you decay
in my mind, fading away

I'll become a malnutritioned mess
That gets high on percocet
And I want you to take care of me
So I can gratefully reciprocate

Laying perfectly, in comatose state
You're a frozen statue of me I know
But you're grave is so deeply made
I can't become an emprisoned slave
So my body shall become so stone

My mind'll leave me to fade
Alone, Alone, I know
So if you love me, you'll stay
To keep me company, to comfort me
In any way that's known

If you're afraid, then let me take my case
To a court where they will play the game
And abort the fact that's clear
I'm done with laying awake
I'm going to disintegrate

In a suit case, you packed for home
With our memories carefully condoned
In my body, you fade away
Alone, Alone, I tried
So in defence, i've got your eyes
Unknowingly, as a lie,
I waved Goodbye
Goodbye, and hello to the death of me
And our ties

[deathbatgurl]

i just wrote a song kinda like this one. it's beautiful. good job

[de la sympathie]

If you want me to be like you
then say something before you decay
in my mind, fading away

Laying perfectly, in comatose state
You're a frozen statue of me I know
But you're grave is so deeply made
I can't become an emprisoned slave
So my body shall become so stone

The above parts were the ones I really didn't like. But the rest was pretty good. Seems like your story gets fragmented, though, or at least what I thought it was about. Mind explaining what it IS about?

[Idlewarrior]

It's about me Losing my family I suppose, and since I've already lost my father(he's a dirtbag, he's not dead) and like, everyone of my family is moving along with their little lives, I just feel that much farther apart, but I'll never tell them how I feel, because it's just who I am, and with that line

Laying perfectly, in comatose state
You're a frozen statue of me I know
But you're grave is so deeply made
I can't become an emprisoned slave
So my body shall become so stone

I am saying how I feel about my father
but that other line

If you want me to be like you
then say something before you decay
in my mind, fading away

It's about me and my relationship with my mother and older sister, how they always express I should be something else, but never really tell me up front

[de la sympathie]

It's about me Losing my family I suppose, and since I've already lost my father(he's a dirtbag, he's not dead) and like, everyone of my family is moving along with their little lives, I just feel that much farther apart, but I'll never tell them how I feel, because it's just who I am, and with that line

Laying perfectly, in comatose state
You're a frozen statue of me I know
But you're grave is so deeply made
I can't become an emprisoned slave
So my body shall become so stone

I am saying how I feel about my father
but that other line

If you want me to be like you
then say something before you decay
in my mind, fading away

It's about me and my relationship with my mother and older sister, how they always express I should be something else, but never really tell me up front

I think I understand it more now. And it looks better since it makes more sense than it did previously. But that's definitely not what I thought it was about, haha.