Star Wars

[3ChinaPolicy]

I hate the evil empire
that keeps Skywalker down
i hate that goddamn Vader prick
who makes my pants turn brown.

I couldn't stand Lord Sidious
he is a stupid dick
The way he raped Mace Windu
it really made me sick

I cried for Ben Kenobi
as Vader sliced him hard
but laughed at fucking Jabba
what a fat tub of lard

I hate that freaking Death Star
it'll make me chuck a fit
but most of all i hate Jar Jar
cos he was fucking shit.

I loved me some Princess Leia
cos she was pretty hot
but it made me think about the fact
that i am fucking not

i liked a bit of pod racing
it wasnt very lame
but i still hate fucking Jar Jar
he puts the films to shame

[3ChinaPolicy]

anyone wanna tell me what they think? would love a bit of feedback

[OveriseFan]

This is very elementary compared to "lick my lips".

A big disappointment.

[checkered.stars]

When I read the first line, I actually got pretty excited...but then it all went downhill from there.

[de la sympathie]

Maybe if it wasn't saying 'fucking' in between every few words, this might be better.

Entertaining at the start, not so much at the last.

[Idlewarrior]

Yes, it's a parody of itself I suppose. Idk if you meant it to be a joke or what, but I laughed once or so, and frowned the rest of the time, atleast this is something New... haha

[lew_1987]

Don't anyone post bad feedback, you might just get a PM.

[3ChinaPolicy]

whats this lew guys problem? You think you're so good just cos you have a bunch of posts, well i got news for you smart guy, the trains already gone home bitch. Shit... If only..

[lew_1987]

My problem is that you really do try far too hard to be funny. When you received a comment from me on one of your pieces pertaining to me thinking that you try too hard (which was not actually an unfair comment at all), you take it as some noble crusade to send me a message asking what my problem is. Post count doesn't come into it.

Aside from that, this piece is fucking dreadful, and once again you're trying too hard to be funny. Stop clogging up the forums with this shit.

[ArTkY_]

Not funny. Leave.

[3ChinaPolicy]

Aight Lew, lets see what you've got bitch, write a better star wars song. Bring it on. Battle royale poem style, lets bounce mother.

[lew_1987]

I would never write a poem on such a shitty topic.

[3ChinaPolicy]

why so lame, play the game, of truth and love and hate. the only thing shit about star wars was JarJar, read my poem and you'll know that. battle me now or lose me forever

[lew_1987]

I have seen Episode One, so I already know that he was annoying, thanks. I don't need to read some shitty 'poem' which is effectively a summary of all 6 films with no extra substance other than childish points of view/diction, awful rhymes and unnecessary cursing.

[3ChinaPolicy]

lew, i have never read a poem from you.
now im sorry lad, didnt mean for that to rhyme.
but seriously it happens, all of the time.
give me your best, your golden words
that'll make mine seem....like a pile of turds.

[lew_1987]

Believe me, there is some generic shit in these forums; even they make yours seem 'like a pile of turds'. If you're really that bothered about my work, fucking search for it. In the meantime, learn how to communicate. Your responses are pathetic.

[3ChinaPolicy]

dont judge me bro, or i turn the blade and saw off my pubic hair.