alright dont laugh...this is a first try..

[eastonsunrise17]

honest opinions would be cool...


your banners long been broken
and i know youve worked to stay around
but until the crowd starts screaming
ill stay alone and ill stay sound
im not much of an artist
but il paint the evening blue
for all the days and all the times
i thought i truly missed you

[punkpixie]

It's too short. The bit about painting the evening was cool, but for the most part it sounded cliche....

[infinite]

i agree.

[.:Autopilot:.]

It's too short. The bit about painting the evening was cool, but for the most part it sounded cliche....
there are some songs that are that short but have made the song go way longer....but yeah if you do want you could probably add some more stuff in

[para ser libre]

honest opinions would be cool...


your banners long been broken
and i know youve worked to stay around
but until the crowd starts screaming
ill stay alone and ill stay sound
im not much of an artist
but il paint the evening blue
for all the days and all the times
i thought i truly missed you


HaHaHaHaHa...
Sorry bro, I just laughed b/c you said not to....KEEP trucking kid...try to just write instead of rhyming it works so much better. Hard ot understand when someone says "Just Right" or "Right form the heart". If you have to think about what your writing then your not doing those 2 things. If you want an example...look at one of the songs i just wrote "Janelle 8:7" or " My childhood dream" I sat down and just started writing didnt even think and they came out.

[eastonsunrise17]

yea dont worry, i dont write the lyrics for my band....

listen though....


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