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thisforyou
09/30/08, 05:28 PM
here's my first set of completed lyrics
Please criticize!!

Seasons
Winter has arrived
It's so cold and depressing
The dark and chilly nights
Just ruin the length of life
In this cold and lonely time
You left me here alone
The cold of this season
Bringing back these memories

Winter is cold and lonely
Spring is now around
To keep us nice and cozy
Summer's here With it's
Late night sunsets
The autumn's winds
Are just setting in
Bringing us back to winter

Spring has come along
Bringing its hope
And warming up
Our cold cold thoughts
Just start fading away
A new beginning has started
I can see I need you now
To bring us closer to happiness

Winter is cold and lonely
Spring is now around
To keep us nice and cozy
Summer's here With it's
Late night sunsets
The autumn's winds
Are just setting in
Bringing us back to winter

Summer's sunny days are here
Times of joy have begun
Camp fire and songs to sing
Nobody wants these days to end
As we sit here and watch
Blue skies and colorful sunsets
I can only think about you
Sitting here with you forever

Winter is cold and lonely
Spring is now around
To keep us nice and cozy
Summer's here With it's
Late night sunsets
The autumn's winds
Are just setting in
Bringing us back to winter

Fall is reminding me
It's getting cold again
Leaving warmth behind
It's like I've frozen
Not wanting to move on
Without you I'm nothing
Fall is dragging me off
Away from that warmth I love

Winter is cold and lonely
Spring is now around
To keep us nice and cozy
Summer's here with it's
Late night sunsets
The autumn's winds
Are just setting in
Bringing us back to winter

All of this reminds me
I really love summer
I hate leaving you there
Winter is tough and cold
But if I survive
I'll see you next spring

by Lucien

Nobodyhearsyou
09/30/08, 09:54 PM
Please criticize!!

Your a fat bitch

MCSmate
10/01/08, 12:53 AM
Your a fat bitch

You shouldn't be like that. I'm sorry but this was better than what I read of your writings...

MCSmate
10/01/08, 12:53 AM
Oh and when I have time (because it's almost 1am here and I have class at 8am) I'll critique this.

h0merg0mez
10/01/08, 09:32 AM
This isn't bad. But it's kinda lame. I hope ya know what I mean.