yes, i'm emo like the rest of you fucks down deep!

[roboticKID]

i walked up the stairs
and saw a man that wasn't there
only a flask and a dozen roses
my mendled mind lay flat
framing being tinkered with all the time
shoot up violence breaks my heart
brings me to my knees at midnight

bloodly knives are thrown in the walls
the barrels are burning blue now
sail into a sea of dying hope
all suggestions say sing for faith
or dream of a sureng in your neck
fill your lungs with fresh air
forget your melting point, or your past

my hands are in the air 10 feet
my feet at cemented to my knees
but yet i still laugh out loud
why are you so lonely
is it the withdraw of poison
or is it your heart skipping a beat

pretending i'm not here, is all the faith i have
its all i've got.
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::Your Eyes Turn Red::
closed eyes, wet lips pressed
shatters of glass, thrown to the floor
pools of blood in the house we owned
can you see our red reflection?
or just your tears mixing in
so lonely, abandoned in a junk yard


a wrecked material, a wrecked feeling
can't you feel the bee stings at your throat
kill, turn yourself over, kill


remember the pick up lines
can you feel yourself tight on the floor
is the rope hurting your wrists
well wake up darling, its a dream
now do you realize the pain
cant you see my pale face
my wet tears, in the flow now

nothing compares to the lastnight
nothing makes me want death
you are only a love, not a gun.
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::Fine is only a 4 letter word::
seems every time i write i kill
poison and blood is the ink i use
the skin is my white pale paper
well heres my story, my cries
cant you tell i'm the happiest person?
cant you tell i'm the most sarcastic person?
i sleep on a bed of nails and blades

my dying cries won't be heard
by you or any god out there
look at me im not that picture perfect
im no ones prince charming, nor a knight
but i do bleed when you cut me
i do feel the pain when you hurt me
so don't take my needles away
dont blow my white powder away

my parents think of me as a discrase
only a punk ***got kid like all teens
i'm not gay, nor a fucking screw up
i'm not a drug dealer, nor HIV positive
but do you look at my different
let it be, let it be, let it be

don't let the poison sink in
dont let this break you

^didn't really like this oen, but you might^


::Fides and Spero (Faith and Hope)::
fucking knives being thrown at my head
the sting of a thousand cigarette burns
just look at me cause i'm the pray you need
don't empty a clip on me, aim your shots
dont think i'm a dead body on the floor
a bundle of sticks laying in the woods


let it be pull the trigger slow
it you feel like dying
then i'm just what you need

the bloody cry out of pain from your room
wakes up the neighbors everynight
but does that stop this so called love?
intoxicated and cotted in my flesh
my arms are not an ashtray
every bit of food tastes of filth
all you can do is keep on lying

you might want to say, i'm not the same.

[emoXcomotion]

holy whoa. like i've said already, you're really talented writer. personally, out of these four my faves are the first and third. with the second, i just couldn't grasp the concept, but keep it up emo kid.
<333courtenay

[mondeoman]

Not bad. Bravo Sean.

[Mother Goose]

My god, this is utterly shocking. Before attempting to write a song you really should learn some basic English, none of it makes sense. I can't put into words how bad they really are, if you were 5 i would just about accept it but you must have basically finished school.

The songs have no emotion what so ever, no story absolutely nothing. You are talentless, give up.

[roboticKID]

i'm a JR in highschool.. and i slack like fuck..

ps, i could care less about your opinion about my writing cause you obviously suck at life, considering your name is mother goose

PPS i have more songs in the poetry section that I MYSELF find to be better.

[mediocrgreenday]

i'm a JR in highschool.. and i slack like fuck..

ps, i could care less about your opinion about my writing cause you obviously suck at life, considering your name is mother goose

PPS i have more songs in the poetry section that I MYSELF find to be better.

dude.. nice try but... its pss not pps. dammit i was on your side till you did that.

[mondeoman]

dude.. nice try but... its pss not pps. dammit i was on your side till you did that.
Are you sure? I thought it was Post Script (P.S.) and then Post Post Script (P.P.S.).

[roboticKID]

oh man.. i think he might be right.. i'm not sure though.. let me google..


i found nothing on neither... so i'm not sure..

[roboticKID]

how about i just change it to..

"hey you fuck, remember this too asshole."

[Mother Goose]

i'm a JR in highschool.. and i slack like fuck..

ps, i could care less about your opinion about my writing cause you obviously suck at life, considering your name is mother goose

PPS i have more songs in the poetry section that I MYSELF find to be better.


What a reply, theres so much to destroy i really don't know where to start. First off you claim i suck at life but in your previous sentence you claim you "slack like fuck" at school. Do you think it's cool to slack at school? If so you are an utter fool and will grow up to be even more of a tool. Now thats poetry, not your pathetic mindless ramble about "love" which you have clearly never found.

Maybe when you're older your knowledge of great music will expand and you'll know why my name is "Mother Goose". Until then keep on writing your dross lyrics so you can look back on your life in embarrassment and realise how much time you wasted on that tripe.

[roboticKID]

Do you think it's cool to slack at school?

oh yeah man, slacking at school is the coolest.. i love being a fuck up..
now that my sarcasim is done, i'll just say that the only reason i slack in school is because i dont ilke school, i do try sometiems but getting around to my work is easier said then done.

Maybe when you're older your knowledge of great music will expand and you'll know why my name is "Mother Goose".

oh arent you just the music god.

or should i say the 'forum master'

[Mother Goose]

One day i hope you have as many "scene points" as you.

[roboticKID]

One day i hope you have as many "scene points" as you.

nice grammar.

[tRigGerFinGeR]

nice grammar.


nice lyrics.

[roboticKID]

sorry i can't catch sarcasim over the internet..

[tRigGerFinGeR]

sorry i can't catch sarcasim over the internet..

If you are incapable of realising where it is used, and where sarcasm is not used over the net, what made you bring up sarcasm? Surely you would have thought my comment was sincere and the possibility of it being sarcastic wouldn’t have crossed your mind? Not to mention the fact you delivered a sarcastic ‘line’ in your previous post… so… you must know when sarcasm is being used, right?

…Or, is “sarcasim” a completely different thing to sarcasm? Shall we put that down to the fact you slack at school, that you can’t spell a simple word? Although, judging by the way you miss spelt it, it hints that you can’t even pronounce it properly, let alone spell it…

I suggest you at least pay attention at school, maybe once every 5 minutes during class? Just to learn the very basics, you'll be better off for it as will your lyrics, which are pretty poor right now.

[Mother Goose]

Pwnt!

[Oi_Cow]

Dude! Nice songs. Really really good, you should get paid to do this dude!

[roboticKID]

If you are incapable of realising where it is used, and where sarcasm is not used over the net, what made you bring up sarcasm? Surely you would have thought my comment was sincere and the possibility of it being sarcastic wouldn’t have crossed your mind? Not to mention the fact you delivered a sarcastic ‘line’ in your previous post… so… you must know when sarcasm is being used, right?

…Or, is “sarcasim” a completely different thing to sarcasm? Shall we put that down to the fact you slack at school, that you can’t spell a simple word? Although, judging by the way you miss spelt it, it hints that you can’t even pronounce it properly, let alone spell it…

I suggest you at least pay attention at school, maybe once every 5 minutes during class? Just to learn the very basics, you'll be better off for it as will your lyrics, which are pretty poor right now.

you know, restating your previous sentence like 3 times doesn't make you look smart for writing a lot or saying a big word. It just makes you look retarded for saying things over and over.


pay attention in school, maybe you'll learn something.

[roboticKID]

Dude! Nice songs. Really really good, you should get paid to do this dude!

thanks dude, i wish i got paid for this!

[tRigGerFinGeR]

you know, restating your previous sentence like 3 times doesn't make you look smart for writing a lot or saying a big word. It just makes you look retarded for saying things over and over.


pay attention in school, maybe you'll learn something.


I think you'll find I didn't restate anything, there are different points in what I said, you'll have to take another look, you probably can't manage it in one read...

You managed to type an 8 word reply which was so incorrect I was able to write a lot on it ...wait... since when was 3 short paragraphs writing a lot?

As for using big words to make myself look smart, which ones sealed the deal for me? Was it when I said 'possibility' or maybe when I said 'pronounce' - You're right I better tone it down a bit, those are some big words.

And well done there, your final comment was very original and therefore funny, don't I just feel down right silly now you've taken what I said and said it to me.

[onethousantears]

I really like your songs, the best one, in my opinion, was the 1 one. Keep writing, don't care about what others say