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[West49ur]

Remember back, when we were kids on the driveway
We would imagine how great life will be
And when we picked up that hockey stick
We said we were going to go far

Remember back, when we were on recess break
When we would hog the swings and pick on the girls
But secretly we hated the swings and loved the girls
We said we were going to go far

Remember back, when we were in high school
And we always said our favourite class was gym
But secretly we loved history or science
We said we were going to go far

Remember back, the summer before university
We all said best friends forever, no matter what
And we would all raise up our glasses and toast
We said we were going to go far

Remember back, through the clichés of our life
When we would imagine how great life will be
It’s all in the eyes of the person
Not the scientist or the politician
We said we were going to go far
And in strides
We’ve all gone far

-thanks.

[bootsydan]

Kinda cliche - and I too am guilty of writing something a while ago that bares resemblance to this.

But thank you for choosing a decent topic and writing about it in a somewhat mature way.

[forgottendreams]

Whilst I see where you were going with this, it is a little cliche, and I find that it doesn't flow particularly well. I think if you refine the ideas, and tighten the delivery you will have something very powerful here.

[Pistol_Whip]

although the topic is fairly decent, i find that your lyrics are a bit cliche. your maturity shone through, however im worried that if you dont refine your ideas and tighten the delivery this may not be as mature as you want it to be.