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Kyle Huntington
10/06/08, 11:57 AM
These are my band's lyrics, I didn't write them personally, but as we all share songwriting/vocal/instrument duties in the band I thought I would post. I'm posting three in here, because it seems pointless making three seperate threads and can comment on each of them in one place if people so wish. Thanks.

Weathervane

Let's take it back to the concrete steps,
Touching teeth and smoking cigarettes,
We made them our own like skin and bone,
We captured the camera lens.

You sampled a taste of being tailor made,
A quick-wit brain behind a custom face,
It all unfolded like a chaotic scene,
It was false like a play viewed through a TV screen.

Your body shakes as the colours fade,
Break the seal and pass the day.

A holiday card they sold to the slaves,
I was placed on your shelf just to boost your wage.

Your body shakes as the colour fades.
They're numbered days in a powdery haze.
Is this all you've got to give or to waste,
Away.

Books About The Sea

All the writer's caught,
A bad case of writer's block,
So they kept the lights turned off.
They live in poetry,
Wear masks of imagery,
In and out of dreams.

Dreams

And they live,
In the ink,
That spills,
From their pens.
Hoping that one day,
It'll make sense.

Open up a shop,
Selling what you don't want,
but it's all you got.
Take your mind off the city,
Read books about the sea,
To help you fall asleep.

Sleep.

So you live,
In the ink,
That spills,
From their pens.
Hoping that one day,
It'll make sense.

Bright Paint On A White Wall

I hate the sound,
And I can't block it out,
I'm going to walk through the country,
Setting songs with the scenery.
I'll let the talkers talk,
Until they've lost their thoughts,
Then replace it with some poetry,
Real words chosen carefully.

I read the lines,
That you left behind,
You were a girl on a London rooftop,
That read quotes from a hardback book.
You said your favourite page,
Was when she fell on stage,
I asked if it made you cry,
You said 'now and then from time to time'

Chorus

We're building bridges made of matchsticks,
You said "it's too hard",
It makes you "feel sick.
How can they be so optimistic?
When we all know,
This is going to shit."

I hate the shapes,
That I watched you make,
Bright paint on a white wall,
All vibrant and symmetrical,
Just like before,
On the marble floor,
You could call it dis-tasteful,
Tainted,
Or just beautiful.

Chorus

TK
10/06/08, 01:39 PM
Really well done man. I enjoyed these more than anything else I've read for the past couple weeks. Sorry I can't give any good feedback right now, I'm about to leave. But I'll try to comment on each set of lyrics later.

Does your band have a myspace?

forgottendreams
10/06/08, 03:55 PM
Hi, I really enjoyed these lyrics! I don't consider myself musically talented enough to off you any real critique other than my little comments :P

But even without any real musical talent I can tell you that these are good! I'd love to hear them with your musical backing.

Kyle Huntington
10/06/08, 06:15 PM
Thanks a lot for the feedback so far, look forward to more.

Here are the songs if anybody wants them, if you do download, let me know what you think.

Weathervane:
http://www.zshare.net/audio/2010692525fd4a32/

Books About The Sea:
http://www.zshare.net/audio/20107150a351a947/

Bright Paint On A White Wall:
http://www.zshare.net/audio/2010734007ef94a1/

Thanks again.

Pistol_Whip
10/06/08, 10:30 PM
i thought your lyrics were excellent, they worked well with the musical backing you presented. sort of slow, moody rock. the vocals on 'weathervane' were a bit...meh, but totally redeemed on 'book about the sea', enjoyed that very much =D keep up the good work and post more of your tracks please =D

Kyle Huntington
10/07/08, 05:45 AM
Thanks a lot, I think you'll see from the tracks that Weathervane had a lot more focus on the music and layers with the lyrics being just another layer instead of a forefront of the song. But look forward to more feedback, thanks again.

Paulb-182
10/07/08, 10:52 AM
very nice

have all your tracks got that feel to them?

Kyle Huntington
10/07/08, 10:55 AM
very nice

have all your tracks got that feel to them?

Yeah, pretty much we have a much more upbeat one that is an old demo if you would care for that as well?

Paulb-182
10/07/08, 10:56 AM
ill check it out, im a big fan of the upbeat numbers haha

Kyle Huntington
10/07/08, 11:03 AM
ill check it out, im a big fan of the upbeat numbers haha

Haha, ok no worries. It's not my vocals on any of these songs by the way, it's band mates, when we next get to studio I'm gonna record vocals on a few new ones, just been guitar otherwise. Stupid writer's block.

Cabin Fever:
http://www.zshare.net/audio/201556954131fcd8/

Paulb-182
10/07/08, 11:56 AM
yeah, now i definitely like this one a lot, nice guitar sound

Kyle Huntington
10/07/08, 12:00 PM
yeah, now i definitely like this one a lot, nice guitar sound

Ta very much, like I said, any other feedback from others would be much appreciated.

lew_1987
10/08/08, 03:58 AM
Some of these were good... I especially liked some of the messages behind the second one, and the imagery of the third one. Nice work, Kyle.

P.S. I'm downloading the songs now, so I'll let you know on those.

beau blood rush
10/08/08, 04:50 AM
awesome man, my bands got a really old song called Cabin Fever to

http://au.youtube.com/watch?v=mQ95Ok6klZ4

Kyle Huntington
10/08/08, 05:56 AM
Some of these were good... I especially liked some of the messages behind the second one, and the imagery of the third one. Nice work, Kyle.

P.S. I'm downloading the songs now, so I'll let you know on those.

Ta very much mate, I think you may or may not have heard a couple of them already but at least you can have them now for keeps.

rii
10/08/08, 02:35 PM
the first was my favorite, it was really interesting and flowed really well.
really good job.

Kyle Huntington
10/08/08, 02:41 PM
the first was my favorite, it was really interesting and flowed really well.
really good job.

Thanks a lot, much appreciated, mp3's are there if you haven't already checked them out.

rii
10/08/08, 02:42 PM
I'm downloading them right now.

the lyrics are really well written.
it's sort of refreshing.

Kyle Huntington
10/08/08, 02:55 PM
I'm downloading them right now.

the lyrics are really well written.
it's sort of refreshing.

That's nice to hear and kind of why I posted them. What with the immense amount of fools typing what they think is hilarious in here and some more cliche things being written as well I just wanted to throw what I had into the mix and see responses and thoughts. Really appreciate that.

rii
10/08/08, 02:59 PM
That's nice to hear and kind of why I posted them. What with the immense amount of fools typing what they think is hilarious in here and some more cliche things being written as well I just wanted to throw what I had into the mix and see responses and thoughts. Really appreciate that.



haha, yeah.
the music is really good as well.
british?

Kyle Huntington
10/08/08, 03:04 PM
haha, yeah.
the music is really good as well.
british?


Yes, indeed. Right now we are concentrating on more writing as I said before, I'm in England, one is in Utah and another member is in L.A right now. So writing onling and sending bits and pieces to eachother in time for when we all get back together in Spring.

kaycey
10/08/08, 03:48 PM
Yes, indeed. Right now we are concentrating on more writing as I said before, I'm in England, one is in Utah and another member is in L.A right now. So writing onling and sending bits and pieces to eachother in time for when we all get back together in Spring.
long time no see, where you been? love the lyrics.

Kyle Huntington
10/08/08, 03:55 PM
long time no see, where you been? love the lyrics.

Thank you, mostly in the Eurokids thread to be honest!

kaycey
10/08/08, 04:00 PM
dude change your avatar back.