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beau blood rush
10/08/08, 01:55 AM
If i could ask what you guys think this song is about that would be awesome, just so i can see how obvious it is.
it's not completely finished yet, the chorus might receive some tweaking.


"dream catcher", catch her ha, ha, happiness
on the window ledge of her widow head
aches hang beside my bedside blues
making manners out of matters of you're holy truth

light up that cigarette
angel you'll be in heaven soon
but no, i won't be there to greet you
cos' you know you're the ghost of sleeplessness
when Z's mark off my calendar's

on your lipstick, i can taste persistence
so bootstrap you're teens back to his suite
with him and you're in, in, in, in
innocence intact

i will never know
what goes on inside your head
but i fall more in love,
every time you fall apart

every last time third times the charm
and you're two off, a one night stand
off between the boy i am
and the man i should have been

on your lipstick, i can taste persistence
so bootstrap you're teens back to his suite
with him and you're in, in, in, in
innocence intact

i will never know
what goes on inside your head
but i fall more in love,
every time you fall apart

lew_1987
10/08/08, 03:50 AM
I thought this could have been really good when I read the first stanza, but it really went down hill from there... sorry. I didn't like the rest of it. Also, check your "your"s and "you're"s, you appear to be getting them mixed up.

beau blood rush
10/08/08, 04:12 AM
cheers for the crit man, and yeah i accidentally made them all "you're"s my bad
fixed now.

P.S adding your personal and music myspace now, i'm a vegetarian too

bootsydan
10/09/08, 05:52 PM
Yo. My comments on this would be very similar to my comments on your Davey Jones Locker piece.