dark black hole

[truthorscare]

my thoughts are brustin though my head
stuck in all this crazy confusion
its so hard to make my own descions
i wanna do this and that
but then my friends wanna it this way
askin why cant we do it another day
they dont realize how much they confuse me

im going down into this dark black hole
can u reach me with that pole
i dont think u can save me from me

sometimes i feel so broken and fragile
i feel like a lil child lost in all this confusion
thats caused by this painful world

im going down into this dark black hole
can u reach me with that pole
i dont think u can save me from me

[ArmoredSleep]

:lol:

[-Pinkerton-]

Ohh I get it!
Wait, no i dont
Jesus that sucked

[truthorscare]

fuck u

[Ryzenfall]

Some people can be dicks on this site, but honestly i think you should fix spelling errors. And maybe show this to people who really know and care about you to help you improve or whatnot.

[ArmoredSleep]

my thoughts are brustin though my head
stuck in all this crazy confusion
its so hard to make my own descions
i wanna do this and that
but then my friends wanna it this way
askin why cant we do it another day
they dont realize how much they confuse me

im going down into this dark black hole
can u reach me with that pole
i dont think u can save me from me

sometimes i feel so broken and fragile
i feel like a lil child lost in all this confusion
thats caused by this painful world

im going down into this dark black hole
can u reach me with that pole
i dont think u can save me from me




o.o

[Chigwinkle]

Certainly not reaching me with that pole of yours.

[a speedo model]

Will not critique until all grammatical and spelling errors are fixed.

[truthorscare]

holy cow people lol so mean but i understand why your mean lmao your bloody hell older then me xD

[oh_how_lovely]

People wouldn't be so harsh is you used grammar sufficiently, i mean if it was a poetical tecnique then it might be understandable but i almost imploded after the first stanza.

[samsara]

um no rhyming words dosent necessarily make it good. Making some sense would be good to do first.