Gray, A

[matt_rawlings]

Gray, A


Retreat, the ballast that’s balancing me
Is holding my heels to the concrete
With the tin can rattle of the old bus shelter
I’m clean, a bottle of clockwork and steam
Far above the below that keeps calling
“Crawl on past me please”

I’ll divvy up all my actions with a little change
Step outside when it rains
Put flowers in the fire place
Turn out the lights just to see if they glow
In a room filled with nothing but…

(Ba ba, ba ba ba ba) etc


Recede, the dust of our daily defeats
Swept on under the rug where you’ll find me
With the toe tap rhythms of this awful weather
I’m free, a bundle of buttons and seams
Set aside while the world keeps on turning
“Stay one second please”

Divvy up all your evenings with a little change
Step outside when it rains
Run laughing through a fire escape
Turn off the lights and see if they glow
In a room filled with nothing but…

[a speedo model]

Loved it. The pacing was perfect and the imagery was, as always, spot on. Another fantastic piece.

[bootsydan]

This was good. And that's about all I've got to add really.

As Josiah said: nice pacing, nice imagery.

[matt_rawlings]

Loved it. The pacing was perfect and the imagery was, as always, spot on. Another fantastic piece.

This was good. And that's about all I've got to add really.

As Josiah said: nice pacing, nice imagery.

Thank you both once again for checking it out.


I don't get enough time to write anything these days, let alone post it on here

[TK]

This was really well written. That being said, I was not the biggest fan of the first stanza. It wasn't bad, and perhaps it was my bad interpretation skills, but I just don't understand what "With the tin can rattle of the old bus shelter" has to do with the previous lines. I thought the rest of this was really solid stuff though. Good work Matt.

[mattybobviously]

Really liking this, my ears need more Matt Rawlings, I still overplay the few House and Home songs out there.

[matt_rawlings]

This was really well written. That being said, I was not the biggest fan of the first stanza. It wasn't bad, and perhaps it was my bad interpretation skills, but I just don't understand what "With the tin can rattle of the old bus shelter" has to do with the previous lines. I thought the rest of this was really solid stuff though. Good work Matt.

The whole first stanza takes place while waiting for a bus home on a rainy day, with the second stanza taking place when I actually arrived home. The "tin can rattle" is the rain bouncing off the bus shelter, which is alluded to in both choruses and the second stanza (..."the toe tap rhytms of this awful weather")

[vandalsandquinn]

It's been far too long.

[matt_rawlings]

It's been far too long.

It sure is. There was actually a 5 week period where I didn't touch a guitar and maybe 2 months of me not writting anything

[vandalsandquinn]

It sure is. There was actually a 5 week period where I didn't touch a guitar and maybe 2 months of me not writting anything
I'm very glad you've written and hope you're doing well

[Ryzenfall]

Loved it. The pacing was perfect and the imagery was, as always, spot on. Another fantastic piece.

Seconded. I like the near rhymes too. You serve the story above all else and that's valuable.

[matt_rawlings]

Seconded. I like the near rhymes too. You serve the story above all else and that's valuable.

Thanks. I have found a great lyrical fascination with taking ordinary mundane events (in this instance, waiting for a bus in the rain after a shit day and making the conscious decision to leave all that crap behind me from the minute I walked into my house) and putting them under a microscope