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AloneInTheDark
04/15/05, 03:33 PM
In the corner, thats right where I met you
the walls were freshly painted
old blood stains covered up

right in that corner, thats where I saw you crying
you told me he hit you, he smacked you around

in the corner, thats where I found him
so I punched him, I pushed him around
blood splattered on the old white paint
blood splattered on the wall
the blood from his fucking face

in the corner, thats where they found me
in the corner, thats exactly where I stand
the black and white stripes blend me into the wall

from this corner, I watch life go by
from this corner, I watch my life fade
from this corner, I watch you fall in love with men who arent me
fromt his corner, I'm punished for you
fromt his corner, I slowly learn to hate you
from this corner, I learn what kind of person you are
from this corner, I see why he hit you, why he smacked you around
from this corner, I wish you were never there
in that corner, I wish you were never....

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This is a very..very rough 'poem' I was required to write for English. We are writing 'passage of time' poems, I want to show how the corner evolved over time. Any suggestions, if it sucks, tell me, I didnt get too attached yet.

BradicalBomb
04/15/05, 11:20 PM
Wow. That's deep. I'd love to hear that put to music.

GREENatarisDAY
04/16/05, 11:12 PM
wow thats so deeeeep i couldnt guess what it was about, god damnit that blew a crimson dick too

apoemtothedead
04/16/05, 11:14 PM
Dude, if you're going to insult them at least be intelligent.

"that verbed preposition adjective curse" is not an insult.

GREENatarisDAY
04/16/05, 11:22 PM
please go to sleep and it was actually a "verb verb article adjective curse"

if it isnt in insult do we then pay homage to such nudity in these parts?

apoemtothedead
04/16/05, 11:24 PM
It's only 11:20 "spider dick." There are things called time zones.

GREENatarisDAY
04/16/05, 11:27 PM
so?

apoemtothedead
04/16/05, 11:28 PM
So why would I be going to sleep?

GREENatarisDAY
04/16/05, 11:30 PM
because you serve as a fuckin dickwad

apoemtothedead
04/16/05, 11:33 PM
serve as a fuckin dickwad

there it is again. verb preposition adjective curse