Amicus Pt. 1: My Corretto Eyes.

[Ryzenfall]

A sample of some poetry I write. This is part of a 'series' that's supposed to be in the point of view of people who i know. I wrote this for and about a friend and tried to put her character into it, so i guess it's a little different if you know the person, but that can't be helped. Let me know what you think.


Oh these tiny flashing lights
In their patterns in the night
Leave me lonely
But they lie so well
And I’m fooled for a while.
I hear my friends across the sea
Through hidden wires and dry waves
And they would laugh with me here
But now there’s delay.
And all these silent truths inside
Move me more than vibrant thoughts behind
My corretto eyes.
The beautiful lies I store on shelves
Come alive at night
Or in midday and spins my head
That chills an equator noon.
Well, yes, maybe I’m not making sense now
But do you see what you’ve done?
What’s the point in that I ask
In a question painted reds and blues.
I could use your adage but I just want a minute
I have so much to give wrapped in black holes and linen
I’m a merry janissary for the saint and sinner
Come quickly
Come slowly
Just listen, say anything at all
I’d rather be alone, I wish you were here
Can’t help but smile when everyone leaves.
I know I am loved.
But please remind me!
Please don’t stop reminding me.

[nkalldayyy]

wow, really intense. it seems to me like you really thought out every line you wrote. i don't quite understand the subject matter but it was a really great read, awesome job : )

[Tyne Lute]

Converse.
Very nice, you're sounding like me.

[xidreamofyou32x]

I love this

[Ryzenfall]

wow, really intense. it seems to me like you really thought out every line you wrote. i don't quite understand the subject matter but it was a really great read, awesome job : )

Thanks! Yeah sorry for the cryptic subject matter. It's about my friend and i'm trying to write it in her point of view as if i'm her.

She lives back "home" on an island and she's separated from her friends who left for other places. It was kind of just for her to 'get' but i kind of like this piece.

[Ryzenfall]

I love this

Ah, thanks.

[nkalldayyy]

Thanks! Yeah sorry for the cryptic subject matter. It's about my friend and i'm trying to write it in her point of view as if i'm her.

She lives back "home" on an island and she's separated from her friends who left for other places. It was kind of just for her to 'get' but i kind of like this piece.
yeah, now that i re-read it with that in mind i definitely see more of where you were going with it.
it's an awesome piece, you should be proud.
: )