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caperucita.2x
11/20/08, 07:18 PM
It's too late to turn back
the grains down unforgiving curves
it is what it is and i'll send
you off with a bouquet of our
photos, lit like a match fallen on kerosene
so you can find your way back
to your own grave, honey

and i'll drink (drink) up to that (i promise you)
'cause i'd rather drown in this (just a shot of hell)
than be caught dead (if you only knew...)
thinking about you in deafening misery

time shows no mercy
each wasted interval
tears me apart inside
the hands strike me down
with each resounding click
I rot from the inside out

I can't stop the guilt trip
burning underneath my skin
the right to feel pain is just a memory
i know you've left me with
all the appeal of a ticking time bomb
oh darling, don't you wish you were me?

nkalldayyy
11/21/08, 12:50 AM
i really liked the rhythm you used in the first half, then you kind of lost me with the rest. i feel like the stanzas didn't really connect.

caperucita.2x
11/21/08, 08:31 AM
yeah i know xT i'm still working on the second half.
thanks for the comment! :D

Tyne Lute
11/21/08, 09:27 PM
Riot.

caperucita.2x
11/24/08, 05:04 PM
oh i forgot to mention... the part that starts with "time shows no mercy..." it's a scream portion.
might be why it seems off. sorry guys >.<