Red, No...Green, No...Blue

[para ser libre]

pouring pestilence into my ear, while I was sleeping…
if and when I wake up, do I still believe those dreams from the night before

train stations have become to many places to have a home,
for long goodbyes and burnt down cigarettes waiting for arrivals.

whirlwind second chances on these rainy days,
and the delays are what keep us coming back for more

reverse just went transmission ending,
over and out,
this is our ending

I’ll be back tommorow

[para ser libre]

Comments, and all, negative, positive... random words?!?!

[ArTkY_]

not bad, but it could use some revisions, heres one

"train stations have become to many places to have a home"
you should say places to call home

[Alex Djaferis]

^what he said

And i dont like the first line. Pouring pestilence...its a bad start to a song.

[para ser libre]

last night while I was sleeping,
you we're decieving, pouring pestilence into my ear,
if and when I do wake up,
do you think I still believe those dreams from the night before...No

when train stations have become to many places to call home,
for long goodbyes and, half burnt down cigarettes
waiting on arrivals.

whirlwind second chances on these rainy days,
and the delays are what keep us coming back for more
(it keeps me here grounded on redletter boards)

reverse just went, over and out,
transmission ending
(this is our ending)
you never got to say goodbye
(don't ever say you never lied)

I’ll be back tommorow



on a side note...
go here...
www.purevolume.com/thedegenerates

listen to It's the Law(buckle your seatbelts) I did the outro chorus the last 20 seconds of teh song, listen to my beautiful voice

[ArTkY_]

a few simple changes made it run better. nj :)