wish upon a clock

[takingback98]

a drip of candlewax leaks onto the table
ive been waiting up for you all night
dont tell me our story's nothing but a fable
if i can get the chance ill make things right
now its 11;11 time to make a wish
the door is unlocked but knob wont turn
ill greet you with a welcome kiss
but instead im left with hopes to burn
and dreams still in my head
its still 11:11 and i wish you were dead

[ArTkY_]

"when you wish upon a [clock]..."

[punkpixie]

I didn't like it. Too short, too emo, too bad.

I don't know what else to say.

[Coco]

I didn't like it. Too short, too emo, too bad.

I don't know what else to say.

Stop being mean to people on the poetry page Ellie!

[ArTkY_]

Well seeing as my first comment was on the title.... this poem sucked balllllls

[punkpixie]

Stop being mean to people on the poetry page Ellie!

!!!! Thats my honest opinion! haha

[ArTkY_]

Stop being mean to people on the poetry page Ellie!
Shes like the nicest one on here...

[Coco]

Shes like the nicest one on here...

I'm well aware of Elllie's boundless amazingness........... she does have a habit of tearing poetry hopefuls a new arsehole though!

[xforestxwaitsx]

I really liked it, even if it is emo.

[SicTrnsitGloria]

not too bad, not your best though. I do like your poems however.

[b e L I E v e]

Let me first say Im loving the quote in your signature, If you havent noticed I am a HUGE fall out boy fan

About the poem

I enjoyed the overall theme of it, but if I had to make on correction, it would be separations and adding more lines, make it more slashed and detailed at the same time if you know what i mean, but yeah, nice ideas