No Expectations

[Anne.Frank]

Lips I've never touched are tasteless
Hair I've never smelled has lost its scent
Eyes I've never seen are dead to me
People I've never met, they leave me

It's hard to bear
This skin is too hard to wear
But what can you do?
When you're stuck in this glue and you can't feel a thing
Anymore

[Troggy]

Lips I've never touched are tasteless
Hair I've never smelled has lost its scent
Eyes I've never seen are dead to me
People I've never met, they leave me

It's hard to bear
This skin is too hard to wear
But what can you do?
When you're stuck in this glue and you can't feel a thing
Anymore

I suppose I see the point of this, but the delivery is atrocious. The first thing you need to do is make sure the individual lines even make sense. You have a parallel in lines 1-4, but hair you never smell never has a scent, it can't lose it, and people you never meet can't leave you, that is obvious. I see what you were doing, but you have to make some sense here. The rest of it makes sense, but is just as bad of writing. Cheap rhymes, open ended vague questions... If you are interested in writing, you should look for a workbook/manual or something to learn the basics of writing poetry/lyrics. There is so much fundamentally wrong here that I don't want to even start.