walking backwards in reverse

[BJW7191]

no matter where i travel to, im always at your exit
no matter what channel i surf to, youre always in this sitcom
no matter what im painting, you are always as my model
no matter if im walking forward, you know ill always turn back

i cant stand this feeling, ill never get over you
driving away from you, you always make me stall
i toss and turn while i try to sleep, but on the other side its still you
my legs could be taken out from under me, but youre not far so ill just crawl

its easy for you because you moved away
but now im stuck here all alone
i look at myself in the mirror, try to get composed
i take a breath and get on my way, youre only a mile down the road

[nkalldayyy]

i don't know how i feel about the second and third lines in the first stanza but i like the 1st and 4th ones.
i can't help but think that these are pop punk lyrics? lol
i like it for the most part, especially the last two lines. i love the title too. it's awesome. : )

[BJW7191]

i don't know how i feel about the second and third lines in the first stanza but i like the 1st and 4th ones.
i can't help but think that these are pop punk lyrics? lol
i like it for the most part, especially the last two lines. i love the title too. it's awesome. : )


its actually just something i realised when i was watching tv the other day... i kept changing the channels and i somehow found something that reminded me of her. it could be a manurism or the way someone would look at the camera, but i just found her in everything


the song is written for acoustic. it sounds poppy bc its cheesy lyrics... im not a lyricist. and its just the way i felt

thanks for the criticism/appreciation... im not usually one to express myself about, well anything

[nkalldayyy]

its actually just something i realised when i was watching tv the other day... i kept changing the channels and i somehow found something that reminded me of her. it could be a manurism or the way someone would look at the camera, but i just found her in everything


the song is written for acoustic. it sounds poppy bc its cheesy lyrics... im not a lyricist. and its just the way i felt

thanks for the criticism/appreciation... im not usually one to express myself about, well anything
well i thought it was a good read. i definitely appreciated your ideas, there weren't any that i didn't like. i think if you spend a little more time on this, and worded it differently, it would be a lot more solid. i understand what you mean about the sitcom, it's an awesome analogy and i definitely get what you're saying.

the best thing about this, in my eyes, is that it's relateable. : )

[BJW7191]

well i thought it was a good read. i definitely appreciated your ideas, there weren't any that i didn't like. i think if you spend a little more time on this, and worded it differently, it would be a lot more solid. i understand what you mean about the sitcom, it's an awesome analogy and i definitely get what you're saying.

the best thing about this, in my eyes, is that it's relateable. : )


thats good to know and i appreciaten all the helpful hints and everything. i knew the way i wrote it wasnt the best bc i wasnt satisfied with the wording but thats the only way i could think of how to write it.

and im glad you think people can relate to it, because it feels like "noone" feels the way i do and its good to know people have been there before

[nkalldayyy]

thats good to know and i appreciaten all the helpful hints and everything. i knew the way i wrote it wasnt the best bc i wasnt satisfied with the wording but thats the only way i could think of how to write it.

and im glad you think people can relate to it, because it feels like "noone" feels the way i do and its good to know people have been there before
anytime : )

i know how you feel... the hard thing about writing, for me, has always been taking all the crazy wonderful things that i think about everyday and arrange them in a way that people can totally understand. it's rough : (

i just posted something below you about a half ago, check it out. i love feedback!

[BJW7191]

anytime : )

i know how you feel... the hard thing about writing, for me, has always been taking all the crazy wonderful things that i think about everyday and arrange them in a way that people can totally understand. it's rough : (

i just posted something below you about a half ago, check it out. i love feedback!



what do you mean posted something below me?

[nkalldayyy]

what do you mean posted something below me?
in the forum, under your thread.

[fishingthe_sky]

You said it yourself, this is pretty cheesy, man. I don't mean that to hate on the sentiment behind it, since reading comments you posted before makes it obvious that this is tied up in real, active emotion. It's just that everything is pretty plain and cliched.

[BJW7191]

You said it yourself, this is pretty cheesy, man. I don't mean that to hate on the sentiment behind it, since reading comments you posted before makes it obvious that this is tied up in real, active emotion. It's just that everything is pretty plain and cliched.


yeah man i feel you. i appreciate the criticism. it shows me that i cant just base my whole lyrics on simplicity. i cant just state my feelings/emotions outright. im new to the whole writting shit thing. but thanks and ill try to be deeper with my lyrics

[thespearkid]

Grammar and structure need some major work as well.

[lew_1987]

Agree with everyone else, but want to add that I think the title is pretty pretentious/bad.

[TK]

I agree. The title was incredibly stupid, sorry. The work, although it's not anything good, every good writer starts with writing bad stuff. And this isn't nearly as bad as some of the shit that gets posted in here.