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TJ Wells
06/09/05, 05:01 PM
Ok i'm tryin' 2 get a job over at emotionalpunk.com (since i got fired here) so if everyone could leave feedback in the replies i would really appreciate it! here it is:

Daphne Loves Derby - On The Strength Of All Convinced
Outlook Records 2005

Overall - 7.5
Sound Quality - 8
Music Quality - 9
Production - 7.5
Originality - 5

For two years now, I have told everyone about the greatness that is Daphne Loves Derby. Ever since I heard “Come Winter” when it was a featured song on mp3.com, I knew these guys were destined for greatness. In the last few months, the hype for these guys and their new album has gotten HUGE. And with their new album On The Strength Of All Convinced, they live up to the hype – for the most part.

The album starts out with “Sundays”, a great opener. It starts out with a slow piano intro and then all of a sudden jumps right into the first verse, very reminiscent of the intro to The Starting Line’s “Making Love To The Camera”. “Hammers And Hearts” has a chorus that you won’t be able to get out of your head. “A Year On An Airplane” and “Birthday Gallery” each have their bright spots, but I found them to be pretty much forgettable. Just when you think that the whole album is going to sound the same, fortunately they pull you back in with “Middle Middle”. While it doesn’t sound much different than the demo they posted on their pureVOLUME page a little while back, they have added a few nice touches. I especially like the maracas in the background. “If You’re Lucky, No One Will Get Hurt” is a nice change of pace, and really shows the strength and potential of Kenny’s voice (which I found to be strikingly similar to that of Aaron Marsh from Copeland). The album closes with “What We Have Been Waiting For”, a chorus driven song that is a good and fitting end to a hit or miss album.

The production for the album by (who else?) Casey Bates is right on, and I think proves why he is probably the most respected producer out in Seattle today. He makes even the slowest song feel like it’s filled with energy, and he is an amazing talent.

These guys have an incredible amount of potential, which, while not at all fulfilled on this album, they certainly are showing better than they did on the Closing Down The Pattern Department EP. Unfortunately, they aren’t doing anything different than what we’re hearing all the time now, be it from Mae, Copeland, Anberlin, This Day & Age…the list goes on and on. Right now, all they’re putting out is a few great songs (“Hammers & Hearts”, “Kirby”, “Middle Middle”) and then a bunch of what I’ll have to call filler. However, I think you give these guys some time, and they will definitely be a band you’re begging your friends to listen to someday.

when 4ever ends
06/09/05, 05:18 PM
i like you.. but i think thats kinda a .. weak review.

VeloriumCamper
06/09/05, 05:20 PM
i go to emopunk.com occasionally, its a pretty good site.
pretty good review, as long as you show them youre reliable and can make decent reviews, theyll take you

Scott Weber
06/09/05, 05:20 PM
Yeah dude, that's about 1/5th of the length it should be. Tells me nothing about the album.

example:

On “Middle Middle”, which was recorded from the earlier demo, the guys show you that they’re a great band to listen to when you just wanna chill out on a hot summer day. The maracas are also a nice touch. For a young band, these guys really know what they’re doing.

That is basically the meat of your album description, and the only feel for the actual SOUND of the record you gave was the miniscule detail that there's maracas. Where's the comments about the instrumentation, the pacing, the song structures, the mood, etc....they know what they're doing? Doesn't tell me anything. I personally think you've got a lot of work to do.

edit: upon re-reading, you've got more than a lot of work to do. That's not good at all. It's SO short. It's like...a paragraph. broken up into 4 parts, or whatever.

Manbotisdead
06/09/05, 05:32 PM
Yeah dude, that's about 1/5th of the length it should be. Tells me nothing about the album.

example:



That is basically the meat of your album description, and the only feel for the actual SOUND of the record you gave was the miniscule detail that there's maracas. Where's the comments about the instrumentation, the pacing, the song structures, the mood, etc....they know what they're doing? Doesn't tell me anything. I personally think you've got a lot of work to do.

edit: upon re-reading, you've got more than a lot of work to do. That's not good at all. It's SO short. It's like...a paragraph. broken up into 4 parts, or whatever.
I'm with Scott on this one. You need some more length, but try not to go overboard with details. Finding a balance is essential.

StartingLine182
06/09/05, 05:34 PM
Yeah I do think its way too short. I dont like really long reviews, but that doesnt tell me much at all about it.

when 4ever ends
06/09/05, 05:40 PM
i really like it when its a track by track review.. just a short like 3 scentences on the lyrics or like how that one song changed the whole mood of the record

ha scott and i both said mood.

:afro:

TJ Wells
06/09/05, 06:16 PM
i really like it when its a track by track review.. just a short like 3 scentences on the lyrics or like how that one song changed the whole mood of the record

ha scott and i both said mood.

:afro:
yeah after reading and rereading my review i realize it just plain...sucks. ill redo it and repost l8r 2nite

when 4ever ends
06/09/05, 06:17 PM
ok

Throwback
06/09/05, 06:18 PM
No wonder you got fired.







j(slash)k

Scott Weber
06/09/05, 06:19 PM
yeah after reading and rereading my review i realize it just plain...sucks. ill redo it and repost l8r 2nite
it's just not even a review, lol.

TitoThePoolBoy
06/09/05, 06:20 PM
i know andrew from ep.com...it's a really good site, though it's been sort of on the downfall over the past few months.

i know he has plans for a re-launch soon, and he's getting a completely new staff. good luck with the job t.j.

as for the review...

:/

TJ Wells
06/09/05, 07:42 PM
ok i reposted my new version of the review...criticism is WELCOMED!!!

sweethypocrisy
06/09/05, 07:45 PM
that better but youre trying to get hired, make it the best you possibly can.

when 4ever ends
06/09/05, 07:52 PM
a lot better. it got me intrested in the cd .. other then before wondering what the marraccas were like

TJ Wells
06/09/05, 07:59 PM
a lot better. it got me intrested in the cd .. other then before wondering what the marraccas were like
hahaha....youre fu-nny.

"you know what i havent had in awhile? big league chew."

TitoThePoolBoy
06/09/05, 09:35 PM
i like it alot...

though there's no mention of my favorite track on the album, 'pollen and salt'. :(

trustmeimokay
06/09/05, 09:41 PM
I hate emotional punk. Very boring website. Go for like thescout.net or leak mob.

Tony Pascarella
06/09/05, 09:49 PM
It's just above average. If you want a job somewhere, your initial review really should blow them away. First of all, you sound very Pitchfork in the first paragraph with the whole "I knew that way back when..."

Second of all, you assume that the reader already knows about DLD. I think it's always a good idea to give a background paragraph on previous releases, history of the band, etc.

Keep working on it, TJ. You're not too far from a really good review.

I read it through a couple more times. You definitely need more meat in that sandwich. How does the album make you feel? How is the instrument work? How are the vocals? You mention the production, but it's basically one brief sentence. Your summation of the album (last paragraph) is fairly good, but you should flesh that out some more, as well.

Tony Pascarella
06/10/05, 10:46 AM
TJ, do you have an update for us yet?

when 4ever ends
06/10/05, 12:16 PM
It's just above average. If you want a job somewhere, your initial review really should blow them away. First of all, you sound very Pitchfork in the first paragraph with the whole "I knew that way back when..."

Second of all, you assume that the reader already knows about DLD. I think it's always a good idea to give a background paragraph on previous releases, history of the band, etc.

Keep working on it, TJ. You're not too far from a really good review.

I read it through a couple more times. You definitely need more meat in that sandwich. How does the album make you feel? How is the instrument work? How are the vocals? You mention the production, but it's basically one brief sentence. Your summation of the album (last paragraph) is fairly good, but you should flesh that out some more, as well.
i agree.. this one was better but if you want to get hired your first like 4 have to be increadable