silent goodbye

[extatic reality]

Turning blank pages in an unwritten book
Looking to the past for answers
The futures almost here
Running is a waste of time
But time’s all I’ve got left

Blank photos falling from the sky
There’s something here
I’m wondering why
It’s a new place, one I’ve never seen before

Pointless dreams of burning bridges
My life’s decisions drowning in the sea
It’s just another wordless song
Sang by the worst among the best

It’s well past midnight
And I’m still counting sheep
The body’s tired; the mind still wants to weep
The stars are going out one by one
Snuffed out like hearts
Bidding us a silent goodbye

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i decided to give it another shot.. hopefully this one's better then the last.. what do you guys think?

[smileseptember7]

That's pretty good just you might wanna change this "Sang by the worst among the best" in my opion it sounds like it doesnt fit, but other than that its good

[extatic reality]

thanks :-D.. it does sound a bit awkward there.. i just like the line in general so im gonna work on it

[sunpoison]

Definitely not as bad as some of the other stuff I've read on this forum, but I don't really like tihs.

Another thing: Did you mean to spell "ecstatic" wrongly in your username?

[Brianfarg]

It screams Thursday...

[smileseptember7]

Yea that line is good, but where it is now it just sounds a little awkward, so if you change it and then move that line somewhere else itd pe awesome

[ArTkY_]

It screams Thursday...
Have you noticed how many people do that? I've started to let it slide.

[extatic reality]

haha sorry if it does scream thursday.. but i like them so i guess they're lyrics have had an influence on me.. oh and i did mena to spell ecstatic wrong.. cuz i made it up a while ago and ecstatic was taken so i decided to make a variation adn i've been using it ever since.. sad thing is some of my friends think its the right way to spell it (exstatic)

[Brianfarg]

haha sorry if it does scream thursday.. but i like them so i guess they're lyrics have had an influence on me.. oh and i did mena to spell ecstatic wrong.. cuz i made it up a while ago and ecstatic was taken so i decided to make a variation adn i've been using it ever since.. sad thing is some of my friends think its the right way to spell it (exstatic)

It really isn't a horrible poem. The fact is it is highly influenced by Thursday, but I guess that is better than being highly influenced by Simple Plan.

[ArTkY_]

Well at least he didn't say "We will rise on the wings of the dove" because someone actually used that in one of their songs.

I liked this one though.

[extatic reality]

thanks.. and if it screamed simple plan i think id delete it..

[ArTkY_]

thanks.. and if it screamed simple plan i think id delete it..
I'd kill you before you had the chance. Then I'd get someone else to delete it.

[extatic reality]

haha i'd thank you from the after life