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Chigwinkle
01/04/09, 09:59 AM
Heres a short piece I wrote today. It explores the idea of how the future could be not as bright as we hope.



In a street bathed by lamp-light,
Sinister shadows like fiends
Begin to creep like machines
Of savage and dark intentions,
Fuelled only by not-so divine interventions.

We met before midnight
Under the stars, like two lovers
Wishing we had stayed safe under our covers,
Because the river’s turned to ice,
Our dragon’s breath will have to suffice.

The canal walkways are more slippery
Than the situation at hand,
So be cautious, I want you to understand
That behind us lurks not our past,
But the impending and it’s coming fast.

Approaching faster than the speed of the light,
The darkness follows,
Flooding the alleyways, alcoves and hollows,
Moving fluidly like a well-oiled cog,
Carrying on its back a deceitful fog.

Now we must hide from what is to come,
Shivering, our eyes closed
By the thought of being exposed,
Quivering and crushed by the growing force
Of devastation and its vast lack of remorse.

beau blood rush
01/04/09, 03:55 PM
you use some really interesting language (example: canal, alleyways, alcoves, hollows cog, lamp-light, bathed

then some nerdy language like dragons breath, darkness and sinister and speed of light

that's just my opinion though.

nice tho man :]

Chigwinkle
01/05/09, 07:21 AM
Haha, cheers dude. I read over that now and realise what you mean xD I meant dragons breath in the sense of steam from your breath on a cold day, but yeah i get what you mean.

Maybe i was just in a real nerdy mood when i wrote it.

Chigwinkle
12/23/09, 02:59 PM
bump

xmy.only.exitx
12/25/09, 05:59 PM
i like this piece, especially the first two lines of the second last stanza. the imagery was vivid without being overwhelming.

wholeofheart
02/05/10, 10:14 PM
cut dragons breath out and a few other words and exchange them with others that go along with your other detail words and you got something..still nice