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alyricman
01/10/09, 12:01 PM
Help me. Please comment and correct this.

You don't have to be alone

With faith, love and hope
You don't have to grope
If you don't have a friend
You can't fight to the end

Look into your soul
When you're out of control
Even if whole of the world is your
You need to take a detour

You are a pilot of your life
And you have co-pilot in your love life
You need an angel from above
To show you what is love

(Chorus)
All for one and one for all
All you have to do is call
To call your friends behind a wall
They will catch you if you fall
You don't have to be alone

Don't drag a feet
If you wanna cross on the other side of street
Don't avoid a street brawl
If you wanna be part of that all

You may not wait
If you wanna change your fate
And you must know
Where you have to go

(Chorus)
All for one and one for all
All you have to do is call
To call your friends behind a wall
They will catch you if you fall
You don't have to be alone

(Bridge)
Do you find what you're looking for
You're looking for the same soul
Which will show you a way to love
In love all is lightening
Whitening and brightening

(Chorus)
You don't have to be alone
All for one and one for all
All you have to do is call
To call your friends behind a wall
They will catch you if you fall
You don't have to be alone
You for one and one for you
You must believe it is true

thespearkid
01/10/09, 11:29 PM
I counted fifteen cliches. Not good at all.

alyricman
01/11/09, 08:05 AM
CAn you tell me why do you think this?

MattRM
01/11/09, 08:10 AM
Rhyming for the sake of rhyming isn't good, for one thing.

thespearkid
01/11/09, 09:39 AM
CAn you tell me why do you think this?
Fifteen cliches.

alyricman
01/11/09, 10:32 AM
What is cliches- please tell me because I don't know English very well.

thespearkid
01/11/09, 12:37 PM
Cliches are phrases or metaphors that are overused.

squeakers18
01/12/09, 09:29 AM
i really liked it and i thought it was good but i did get kinda confused on some spots

TotalCollapse
01/17/09, 06:12 PM
Rhyming for the sake of rhyming isn't good, for one thing.
Agreed.

Roboman
01/17/09, 06:21 PM
Rhyming for the sake of rhyming isn't good, for one thing.

I'll cut him some slack since he's not a native speaker, but yeah, definitely a good point.