Then Surely We. [Work In Progress.]

[Viva Sonata]

Needs two more verses, but enjoy what I've got.

(intro/chorus)
If ever you and I,
Then surely we. x2

(First verse)
As this reflection stares through me,
I’ll say, “Don’t walk away” (Don't walk away)
From all of this!
You can’t put out this fire we built,
I’d rather let the rain come down instead
Of giving me all of this talk,
Why don’t you show me what you’ve got?
You’ve got nothing to say!
Believe what you may, just
Don’t walk away.

(Bridge)
Who are you kidding?
This is just another step.
We try and plan the future, but it's
Just as fucked up as this.

Don't tell me what we don't got,
just tell me you won't ever stop.

(Chorus)

Thoughts?

[a speedo model]

I'll give this a full critique after class, but briefly. It's n ot good, bad imagery with uninteresting ideas that are executed uninterestingly.

[lew_1987]

Yeah, I think this is pretty uninteresting because there's nothing in here that really makes me think or even want to think.

[speakhandsforme]

Broad, borrowed, and lacking in specificity.