Whisper Blue

[oddwithoutend]

Oh how the wind will come
And take you for your worth
How differently we’ll feel Earth
And Neptune too
And it turned out the sword in the stone was a wand
And it turned out the wand was plastic
And it turned us around
Turned us all around
So carefully touch my skin
Feel inches of the living and the gone
And all of the in between
Feel our riches
Feel our worth
And the naysayers will have it their way
And their prayers will cast us away
Oh how I want the wind to come
And blow us where it will
And we will go where we will
And we will go where we will
And I will see you there
I see your teeth
You show them to me
You’re a spectacle
Full of dreams
To give and receive
So beautiful you are
Take me with you

[oddwithoutend]

If anyone could tell me what they think of my poem that would be greatly appreciated.

[EatItSucka]

And it turned out the sword in the stone was a wand
And it turned out the wand was plastic


Very clever

[bootsydan]

And it turned out the sword in the stone was a wand
And it turned out the wand was plastic


Why didn't you just say 'And it turned out the sword in the stone was plastic'

I may not be up with the times here, but isn't a plastic sword as useful as a plastic wand?

[oddwithoutend]

Very clever

Thanks man.
Why didn't you just say 'And it turned out the sword in the stone was plastic'

I may not be up with the times here, but isn't a plastic sword as useful as a plastic wand?

This is a reasonable question to ask I think. The first line indicates the magic associated with the sword, the splendour that brings people into wanting what they desire, and the second line indicates that your desire isn't what you cracked it up to be. The line could have been something like the following if this helps:

i saw her eye sparkle in the light
but it turned out the sparkle was a tear

That didn't flow quite as well lol, but I hope that makes sense to you.