Flight 721

[GREENatarisDAY]

I know most of you arent fans of my writing but thats okay, this isnt a final draft i constructed this fairly quickly and im just looking for what stands out and is worthy of keeping so please, be my guest.


you're departure flight
was right on time
we are swinging from from left to right
all direction is suspended
and i survey the sky
looking for UFO's or any threats
just to confirm your saftey
If it was up to me
We'd be laying in your basement
and this summer night wouldnt feel as empty
for im devoid of any gratitude
I will chase you until you confess to
your petty acts of theft and vandalism
I could leave you acquitted, but it would only
reveal the fractions of love that
remain in this unbalanced equation
i am the terminal rat
because sometimes it does feel like you're
26,000 feet in the air
unreachable
invisible
distant
you lay next to me
yet you seem so distant
my phone rings all i see is your number
all i hear is your voice
all i see is your face
all i need is you
so i wait, watch and listen at the end of the runway

come. back. to. me.

[Andy]

Better than most Green Day lyrics.

[riot_girl89]

ummm...shit?

[GREENatarisDAY]

ummm...shit?

im sorry i can take criticism but with your user name being riot girl.....

[Mark is God]

...your in flight movie will be something with Adam Sandler, the only thing more pathetic than these lyrics.

[ArTkY_]

im sorry i can take criticism but with your user name being riot girl.....
Haha, so true.

[Andy]

im sorry i can take criticism but with your user name being riot girl.....
Said the man with a just as horrid username.

[Alex Djaferis]

Better than most Green Day lyrics.

funny you say that. when i read it, it reminded me of green days first album.

[GREENatarisDAY]

Said the man with a just as horrid username.

I'm sorry, im a pioneer of this forum, i created that username when i was amid my pop punk mania stage. However, Green Day is one hell of a musical group....despite what you might say..... :redface:

[Alex Djaferis]

I'm sorry, im a pioneer of this forum, i created that username when i was amid my pop punk mania stage. However, Green Day is one hell of a musical group....despite what you might say..... :redface:

yeah i remember you from ages ago...we signed up at around the same time..

[GREENatarisDAY]

yeah i remember you from ages ago...we signed up at around the same time..

thats why we rule

[Mark is God]

thats why we rule
minus you.

[GREENatarisDAY]

minus you.

i'll make this fair, post one of your pieces of poetry. Do it. I dare you.

[Mark is God]

i'll make this fair, post one of your pieces of poetry. Do it. I dare you.
I realized I had no talent in writing poetry. So I don't. I hope you follow my example.

[GREENatarisDAY]

I realized I had no talent in writing poetry. So I don't. I hope you follow my example.

I doubt you could recognize good poetry, and if the above is so, that puts you in no position to pollute these forums with your vague and severely trite sense of humour

[Mark is God]

trite poems call for a trite sense of humor.

[GREENatarisDAY]

trite poems call for a trite sense of humor.

touche.

[Andy]

Im thinking about getting a new nick:

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