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In Dolorosa
07/28/05, 02:35 PM
Eh, not my best work, but I thought I'd just throw it out there.


You’ve Sunk My Battleship
And if you lay rested in my blankets, things could be different. Get tangled in my arms and legs. Just fucking breathe, sleep, dream. And when I wake up, I’ll pull the curtains shut and we can crawl under the sheets, get involved like it's midnight, when everyone else was asleep. I refuse to let this go, and I’m sick of being lectured by many on something that so few have ever known. It’s hard to breathe underneath the surface, when your memories become your oxygen, and those memories are worthless. Try and swim with no feeling and talk without breathing, you’ll go under too.

Mark is God
08/01/05, 05:03 PM
You've sunk my faith in mankind.

In Dolorosa
08/01/05, 06:59 PM
You've sunk my faith in mankind.
Please show me some of your writing, and then we'll argue.

Mark is God
08/01/05, 07:09 PM
Please show me some of your writing, and then we'll argue.
No. I know I can't write, so I take the path of not plaguing other people with shitty writing. I wish you would follow by my example.

my zippers down
08/06/05, 04:03 PM
oh i love that game battleship, i used to play it all the time.

afk999
08/07/05, 01:51 PM
not bad

EndorsePunk
08/07/05, 10:20 PM
oh i love that game battleship, i used to play it all the time.Meh. give me neg rep all you want i think im in love with this guy.

ArTkY_
08/07/05, 11:37 PM
Good, although you posted this in the poetry and the lyrics section. So just to boost my post count, here's another positive comment on your stuff.

em0_stars
08/08/05, 09:50 PM
it's ok, i like it.