Little Miss Peppytone

[as_we_learn]

Well I've got a few things to say about this little day.
Today has kept me cautious, a little unsure,
but it will go away with time, oh I'll make you mine.
That's why i keep my eyes closed and my hopes and thoughts open.

That's why I'm singing Happy Birthday Little Miss Peppytone.
May your smile always be wide.
May your heart keep me deep inside?
Happy Birthday Little Miss Peppytone.
I hope everything goes well.
I hope you have the time of your life.

I don't mind sitting silent anymore
in my dark calm room with my guitar.
Thinking 'bout the time we spent cccounting
everything on silence and our pretty little actions.

That's why I'm singing Happy Birthday Little Miss Peppytone.
May my sweater keep you safe.
May your touch rid me of this pain today.
Happy Birthday Little Miss Peppytone.
I'll sing until the sun burns up,
I'll sing because I don't want you to give up on me.

[SeeYouSeptember]

i like it

[as_we_learn]

Thanks, but I'm looking at it and it's got extremely cliche at parts. Anyways if you want to listen to the song and let me know if I should work on it. www.myspace.com/sowingseason12956

[JimGray]

Thanks, but I'm looking at it and it's got extremely cliche at parts. Anyways if you want to listen to the song and let me know if I should work on it. www.myspace.com/sowingseason12956 (http://www.myspace.com/sowingseason12956)

I agree with the cliche-ness of it, but it's not bad by any means. Just a little hard to follow.

[lew_1987]

Yeah, there were a few cliche bits, but overall it was pretty decent.

[bootsydan]

It's like everyone else said.

Little cliche. Little sentimental. But not bad.

The song needs a lot of work though. I like the guitar at the start. But the vocals aren't the best the melody sometimes seems to loose track.