Suburban Living

[GuitarR0cker1]

I started writing lyrics after a long break and I came up with this in about 10 minutes when I was bored in class. This is a partial song, I am pretty clueless about where I should go next with it. I tried my hardest to make it very catchy as well.

If God was human
He would contend life sucks
With no purpose or true aims
Our lives are determined by luck
We all ask ourselves over and over
What do we do! What do we do!
Until we run out of breath
then expect no response

Chorus:
I've learned to
Stop trying, stop trying
Life is a waste of breath
Until dying, until dying
I go through motions
Without fighting, without fighting
Is it all my fault?
With no purpose for suriving?

My life is lived as if on lithium
But I do no drugs
My current job is a waste of time
But what should I expect?
No one cares about turpentine
For flooring and decks

Chorus

Maybe I should end it
End it, end it
But there's no where to go
No chance for me
So I've decided to wallow
In degrading self-pity

This is suburban living
Suburban living
Without living, only decieving


Well feedback would be nice

[eliselovesmusic]

It's a bit depressing for me but I still like it haha... 10 minutes you reckon? Impressive :-)

The line "So I've decided to wallow In degrading self-pity" is a great way to sum up the song...

I soooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo know what you mean about surburban living though... Try growing up where I live haha

[GuitarR0cker1]

I guess this isn't as awesome as I thought it was when I was bored in class, lol.

[leezer]

It's not awful but not good either. Your line about turpentine was interesting but out of character with the rest of the piece. I liked the read but only out of curiousity, it wasn't too unoriginal (if a bit idealistically nihilist minded). You should keep working at this piece til it becomes something you are proud of.