Blue Stony Dream!

[alyricman]

You wait for me so long
I am ready to come in your bosom
My life is full of spirits
Therefore I can't stop disappearance

Heaven, Earth and hell
Are our a certain and endless stations
But first we must buy ticket
That we can obtain only on the Earth

(Chorus)
My blue stony dream
In my eyes all stars shine
Like I'm in heaven tonight
And land is far away
Of my tired blue legs
I am clear out my begs

I can't feel more bullet
And all pains for me are disappear
I know what I can get
I can get ticket for heavenly airline

Bright sun is under me
It looks like I am above the horizon
But moon came like bee
And shoot me down on the Earth station

(Chorus)
My blue stony dream
In my eyes all stars shine
Like I'm in heaven tonight
And land is far away
Of my tired blue legs
I am clear out my begs

(Bridge)
Candle is burning like sun
Sign is alight like moonlight
All is holy what is born
And love is there when it's needed

(Chorus)
My blue stony dream
In my eyes all stars shine
Like I'm in heaven tonight
And land is far away
Of my tired blue legs
I am clear out my begs

[alyricman]

I need comment plz

[Mike Smith]

No offense but using lines like "You wait for me so long
I am ready to come in your bosom" dont make for a very good first few lyrics to a song.

I lost all interest as soon as i saw that. And the song itself seems very strange. Whats the meaning? Maybe that will help me and others on here understand it better, because it makes no sense to me.

[alyricman]

I don't know English very well and if you see any grammar mistake please tell me. This song is about death, about one man who has clinical death; he got another chance. Blue often represents endlessness and then I say blue dream-death. Stony is fast, fast dream- death. Do you know what I want to say through this lyric?

''You wait for me so long
I am ready to come in your bosom''- For him might wait Lord or his beloved people on heaven.

''Heaven, Earth and hell
Are our a certain and endless stations
But first we must buy ticket
That we can obtain only on the Earth''- this is clearly, I think?

''Bright sun is under me
It looks like I am above the horizon''- he come at heaven...but...

''But moon came like bee
And shoot me down on the Earth station''-...but he woke up

''I can't feel more bullet
And all pains for me are disappear''- when you are on heaven you can't feel pain...and all people are same then.

''I am clear out my begs''- we can't deport nothing on heaven and hell...

Can you now comment?

[Mike Smith]

I don't know English very well and if you see any grammar mistake please tell me. This song is about death, about one man who has clinical death; he got another chance. Blue often represents endlessness and then I say blue dream-death. Stony is fast, fast dream- death. Do you know what I want to say through this lyric?

''You wait for me so long
I am ready to come in your bosom''- For him might wait Lord or his beloved people on heaven.

''Heaven, Earth and hell
Are our a certain and endless stations
But first we must buy ticket
That we can obtain only on the Earth''- this is clearly, I think?

''Bright sun is under me
It looks like I am above the horizon''- he come at heaven...but...

''But moon came like bee
And shoot me down on the Earth station''-...but he woke up

''I can't feel more bullet
And all pains for me are disappear''- when you are on heaven you can't feel pain...and all people are same then.

''I am clear out my begs''- we can't deport nothing on heaven and hell...

Can you now comment?

All i will say now is damn thats a deep lyric haha

[alyricman]

All i will say now is damn thats a deep lyric haha
What you want to say with it?

[xmy.only.exitx]

i think your work lacks similies and metaphors that are the basic ingredients of a lyric/poem. you take a too logical approach and go head on like ''You wait for me so longI am ready to come in your bosom'' . i think you came to her bosom just a tad too fast. take your time and watch the flow.