Pity is for the weak

[SCRE4MO]

Lost in this seemingly endless sea
Torn between fiction and reality
Visions of grief
Crashing through your thoughts as though they were glass
Sleep is nonexistant
Hearts shatter as tears fall
Bodys gone numb, fear engulfs the soul
Losing hope as moments pass
Mesmerized as time elapsed
Eyes glisten as the dawn breaks
Sudden realization
Theirs hope
Searing through your veins
Disarming all the pain
Burning through

[Mike Smith]

This isnt really a song...

But it seems extremely depressing and kind of emo if you can call it that

I suggest you try writing happier rhymes, and maybe people would give you better reviews.

[thespearkid]

Writing isn't your thing.