LyreBird

[Kyle Huntington]

Haven't posted in a while, another of my bands. Lyrics credit entirely to band mate this time;

Lyre Bird

I saw the sun asleep behind the clouds,
From the window of the empty house,
Where we used to take the tiles from the walls,
And wish we were born 50 years ago.
The earth set sail on a stormy sea,
An uneasy platform of frequency,
A digital spark set fire to the past,
Leaving nothing left but a dead postcard.

It makes me feel so invisible,
Like a tiny grain of salt,
Dissolving in a swimming pool.

Keep piling up receipts,
Saying "it's just temporary".
I'm a half way house with no vacancy,
On the edge of a town where no one will stay,
There is only the sound of a waste of space.

I'm a lyre bird that's learned to imitate,
Just to keep up with the change.
Take my photo and put in a frame,
But will you remember my name.

You made me feel so invisible,
Like a tiny grain of salt,
Dissolving in a swimming pool.
Or like a phone that never gets called.

[lew_1987]

Even though I'd heard the song before, I didn't fully appreciate the lyrics until I saw them written down. These are really good man.

[TK]

I agree with Lew, this was really good.

[Kyle Huntington]

Thank you I really appreciate the compliments, anymore feedback would be awesome.

[TK]

I like the last line, but it seems really forced in and out of place to me. Really, that's my only complaint. I loved the first stanza. Does your band have a myspace?

And by the way, sale = sail.

[Kyle Huntington]

I like the last line, but it seems really forced in and out of place to me. Really, that's my only complaint. I loved the first stanza. Does your band have a myspace?

And by the way, sale = sail.

Well noticed, I had just pasted from a conversation with band mate when he wrote them out for me.

Yeah but the vocals aren't what we want on the songs on our myspace, they are being re-recorded with different members singing different songs. Here: Louellen (http://www.myspace.com/louellenuk)

[lfdfforever]

this was really really good.

[Kyle Huntington]

this was really really good.

Appreciate it, thanks a lot. Nice to get feedback, currently working on some new songs with the band so may have more lyrics or mp3's for anybody interested soon.

[bootsydan]

This was good.

I really liked these bits:

I saw the sun asleep behind the clouds,
From the window of the empty house,
Where we used to take the tiles from the walls,
And wish we were born 50 years ago.

Keep piling up receipts,
Saying "it's just temporary".

You made me feel so invisible,
Like a tiny grain of salt,
Dissolving in a swimming pool.
Or like a phone that never gets called.

They are fantastic.

The only lines I didn't particularly enjoy were:

I'm a half way house with no vacancy,
On the edge of a town where no one will stay,
There is only the sound of a waste of space.

Kinda gets a little too self depreciating for my liking.

And I also didn't like how you followed 'I'm a half way house...' with 'I'm a lyre bird...' - However in saying that, depending on the music - that could fit perfectly. And I'm going to assume you're right and it does fit right with the music. In which case just ignore this. But otherwise I would suggest changing the next stanza to start like 'Just like a lyre bird, I've learned to imitate' or something. Do lyre birds imitate?

Anyway, my criticisms are kind of nit picky. So you really don't have to pay that much attention to them. This was good.

[ArTkY_]

Not bad at all, my friend.

[xidreamofyou32x]

Very nice

[DJ_Tanner]

this flows so nicely
i really enjoyed this!

[Kyle Huntington]

This was good.

I really liked these bits:

I saw the sun asleep behind the clouds,
From the window of the empty house,
Where we used to take the tiles from the walls,
And wish we were born 50 years ago.

Keep piling up receipts,
Saying "it's just temporary".

You made me feel so invisible,
Like a tiny grain of salt,
Dissolving in a swimming pool.
Or like a phone that never gets called.

They are fantastic.

The only lines I didn't particularly enjoy were:

I'm a half way house with no vacancy,
On the edge of a town where no one will stay,
There is only the sound of a waste of space.

Kinda gets a little too self depreciating for my liking.



Thanks for that, yeah it is, but that also makes the theme of the song, I also like the picture it paints in my head, but I appreciate why you wouldn't like them for your reason.

And I also didn't like how you followed 'I'm a half way house...' with 'I'm a lyre bird...' - However in saying that, depending on the music - that could fit perfectly. And I'm going to assume you're right and it does fit right with the music. In which case just ignore this. But otherwise I would suggest changing the next stanza to start like 'Just like a lyre bird, I've learned to imitate' or something. Do lyre birds imitate?

Anyway, my criticisms are kind of nit picky. So you really don't have to pay that much attention to them. This was good.

Yeah LyreBirds are found in Australia and are known to imitate the sounds they hear such as the sound of a camera, a chainsaw, a siren. This gets good from 1:00 but really good from 1:50;

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Thank you for your feedback though, really appreciated.

Not bad at all, my friend.

this flows so nicely
i really enjoyed this!

Very nice

Thanks a lot, really nice to hear.

[lew_1987]

The chainsaw bit was amazing.

[Kyle Huntington]

I know it's crazy, such a cool animal.