Blankets

[CTMarshall]

I rarely write poems/lyrics like this, but I wrote it to put on the inside of Christmas gift that I gave to my girlfriend. Shortly after, I did turn it into a little song. Its short and to the point, but tell me whatcha think.

--Blankets--
And It’s comforting to know
That when we go
We don’t really ever go
away.
And it’s comforting to see
That when you leave
You don’t really ever leave
me.
When rest is hard to find
It’s nice to know that I’m yours
And you are mine
tonight.

Because I’ve got
all of these blankets,
But nothing to keep me warm.
And I’ve learned
How to fake it,
But I’m shaking
More and more,
Because without you
I am nothing.
Just a boy
Who can’t keep warm…

[CTMarshall]

bumpity bump

[Hyp]

I really like the concept and the imagery here. Don't know how much more you can talk about blankets, but I think it could use another verse or two to touch a few hearts.

[CTMarshall]

I really like the concept and the imagery here. Don't know how much more you can talk about blankets, but I think it could use another verse or two to touch a few hearts.

thanks man. haha yeah, it is kinda hard to continue the concept, but its just meant to be short and sweet.

[CTMarshall]

the lovely bumps

[andrew4045]

http://www.theslanket.com/images/rotating_home_image/2.jpg

[CTMarshall]

haha..that's pretty good. They should use my song as their next jingle.

[CTMarshall]

bumps mcgee.

[CTMarshall]

bummmp

[fishingthe_sky]

Technically, I didn't like the line breaks in the first stanza. Thematically, this probably got you laid, so I'm not going to really bother with critiquing it.