My Own Prison

[Mike Smith]

The song is called My Own Prison...
Please any input would be nice.

My Own Prison:

Verse 1:

Sometimes lifes like a prison
Seems like you're never gonna get out
No one seems to listen
Whenever you scream and shout

Chorus:

I think im going insane
From all of this despair
Everyones against me
No matter where I go

Verse 2:

I wish there was a window
A way for me to get out
But that will never happen, no
Cause no ones there to help

Chorus:

I think im going insane
From all of this despair
Everyones against me
No matter where I Go

(Insert guitar solo here)

Chorus:

I think im going insane
From all of this despair
Everyone against me
No matter where i go

(Outro)

[Hyp]

Kinda like a watered down FFTL song.

The lyrics are the epitome of cliche. If nothing else, make some violent, dead body references.

Other than that, attend a few creative writing classes?

[Mike Smith]

Kinda like a watered down FFTL song.

The lyrics are the epitome of cliche. If nothing else, make some violent, dead body references.

Other than that, attend a few creative writing classes?

lol yeah i seem to have writing cliche songs down to a science now for some odd reason lmao

You want to see a song about dead bodies? lol

I bet i could either write one or find one i wrote already that sort of has to do with that

Ill be posting another song here in a few minutes lol

[Hyp]

Actually, I want you to become a better writer before posting any more songs. ;)

[thespearkid]

Not good. Too many cliches. Annoying center text is annoying.

[Mike Smith]

Actually, I want you to become a better writer before posting any more songs. ;)

Haha oh thanks for the boost of confidence ;]. I've written at least 50 songs in the past year or so so i've ha d alot of time on my hands. Some of them are better than others. I just want peoples opinions on ones i wasnt so sure about myself.

Ones like this one.

[Mike Smith]

Not good. Too many cliches. Annoying center text is annoying.

Yeah i guess im just good at writing stuff with cliches in it haha.

And im sorry i didnt realize that center text annoyed anyone? Usually when im on other music forums they tell me to use center text for the songs and stuff. But if it annoys people on here i will stop it.

Oh by the way...nice double negative when you say Annoying center text is annoying ;]

[thespearkid]

Yeah i guess im just good at writing stuff with cliches in it haha.

And im sorry i didnt realize that center text annoyed anyone? Usually when im on other music forums they tell me to use center text for the songs and stuff. But if it annoys people on here i will stop it.

Oh by the way...nice double negative when you say Annoying center text is annoying ;]
You're new to the internetz, aren't you?

[JimmyIymmiJ]

A court is in session, the verdict is in. No appeal on the docket today just my own sin....

[yutsmcgee]

A court is in session, the verdict is in. No appeal on the docket today just my own sin....

qftw

[Mike Smith]

You're new to the internetz, aren't you?

No lmao. Why would i be new to the internet? I've used it for over 10 years now. I was like 7 when i first started using the internet. Im almost 18 now.

A court is in session, the verdict is in. No appeal on the docket today just my own sin....

Ummmmm....wtf?

qftw

Whats qftw mean? I'm not 100% sure on EVERY abbreviation out there lol