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Mike Smith
02/14/09, 12:04 PM
I just wrote this a few minutes ago. Feedback please? Im not sure if i 100% like it so im seeing if other people do or dont

Untitled:

Verse 1:

The countries are fighting
And people are dying
Theres fires igniting all around us
Which leave the children crying

Chorus:

For some reason we all want to be on top
When will all of this violence stop
So many people just wish they were dead
Cause another wars about to raise its head

Verse 2:

Theres bombs blowing up towns
Tons of hostages taken
Planes bein shot down
What kind of world are we making?

Chorus:

For some reason we all want to be on top
When will of this violence stop
So many people just wish they were dead
Cause another wars about to raise its head

(Bridge Here)

Chorus:

For some reason we all want to be on top
When will all of this violence stop
So many people just wish they were dead
Cause another wars about to raise its head

SeeYouSeptember
02/14/09, 02:07 PM
forced rhymes, you suck

Kirsty.com
02/15/09, 12:26 PM
Thats Kinda Rubbish. No Offence.