All I know...please read

[shortone1320]

I got a new one and here it is:

All I Know

All I know
is we gave it a go
about six months ago
you were my everything
my every hope, dream and desire
It ended just as quick as it had began
the situacion grew dire
as we fought every little thing
but I was never over you

Chorus:
'Cause
All I know
Is that you are the one
hangin on to hope before its gone
to the dream
of you and me together again

All I know
is that I tried another girl
The feelings were there
but not as strong
or near as long
All I know
Is that I'm Wrong
you are the only girl for me
and soon we will be
more than we ever were before

Chorus

All I know
is as this one ends
we became friends
but wanted more
I know it be stronger than before
I was ready to gamble
but you weren't ready to ante-up
It'll take a convincing ramble

Chorus

All I know
is I'll prove it to you
that I can love you
and be a friend
I'll stick by till the end
be your support when you bend
so you won't break in anyway

All I know
is when I hold you in my arms
there will be no harm done
You are the bow
around my heart
making the present complete
without you I'm at an all time low

Chorus

But all I know is I get lost in your eyes
your simile lights my world
as the world can pass you by
I can't pass on by
'cause all I know
is to me you are the world

[shortone1320]

Another previous one:

http://www.absolutepunk.net/showthread.php?t=742432

[Kirsty.com]

I Like it.

[readyfredi]

I Like it.
:wallbash:

[gilfers]

with out trying to sound really mean, it's good but kinda basic, it's lacking something that makes it stand out.
not trying to be mean or anything (:

[Un'Aria Ancora]

Generic, cliche... another heart broken teen poem.
Try some originality.
Constructive criticism.

[shortone1320]

how ironic, it was actually written to an ex that I ended up dated again.... andwe all know how that works...

and adding 'constructive criticism' doesn't make so u can say it sucks, its just like saying, 'no offense' after a mean comment.

and if u didnt like that one click the link to view the other one, that should be the orginality.

they're more to come, this was actually one of my first ones, and i posted it just to see what would be said, and all of it was

[Jabble524]

Hey I liked your poetry. Good stuff.

[shortone1320]

Hey I liked your poetry. Good stuff.

Thanks a bunch