If your gunna pick her. </3

[Kirsty.com]

If your gunna pick her,
Just do it now
If you want to choose her
I’ll just take my bow

Yes it’s my curtain call,
But no I don’t want to just fall.
I can’t take this pain any more,
Its just not how I roll or the law.

My head is messed up,
And my heart is in knots,
This feeling of her is making me feel shot.
Bang in the centre of love and hate.
How do I feel?
I just don’t know mate :\

[EmzoidBooshFan]

Thats awesome (:

[eliselovesmusic]

....Its just not how I roll or the law....

....I just don’t know mate :\


Intense.

You are sooooooo British haha ;-)

[Kirsty.com]

oooooooooooooook?

[newtothis]

My head is messed up,
And my heart is in knots,
This feeling of her is making me feel shot.
Bang in the centre of love and hate.
How do I feel?
I just don’t know mate :\

If you are going to work on this some more, I would start with this stanza. It is just like your other poem, "Drowing." The rhyme is too forced. You need to just let your thoughts flow. It doesn't always have to rhyme or have a certain rhythm to be good. Also, try to stay away from the cliches, "my heart is in knots," or "This feeling of her is making me feel shot."

[x1onexwo1fx]

speeeeeellllllcheeeeeeeck!!!!!

(^^^huh, there's a red line under that. ironic.)