Hopes and dreams(:

[Kirsty.com]

Don’t let go of your dreams and hopes
Cause there the things that keep you alive.
Never be forced to forget of their face,
Just because they don’t like your lies.

Hold onto everything with all your strength
And happiness will suddenly grow in length.
Smile like you want to and laugh like you care
Because everyone who’s looking are the ones you want to be there.

Life is for living and living well
Never regret what meant so little hell
So kick off your shoes and loosen your tie
Chill out and relax don’t let this life pass you by.

Look into my eyes and see all my pain
Hold onto my hand and feel all the shame
Then take my heart and help me feel whole
Make my world feel completely in control.

[thespearkid]

There is no beat. It has too many cliches. It is not good.

[Jabble524]

Hey I liked it. Definitely important to hold on to your hopes and dreams.

[Kirsty.com]

Thank you:)
And I completley agreee.

[Mike Smith]

Us this as your chorus:

Hold onto everything with all your strength
And happiness will suddenly grow in length.
Smile like you want to and laugh like you care
Because everyone who’s looking are the ones you want to be there.

And make a few more verses to make it a little longer, and i think you have something there. It might not be a rock type song but i could definitely see it as a rap/hip hop type song that someone like Jay-Z or The Game would sing lol

[Kirsty.com]

Wow. Really?
Thanks. Lol. I Will re-do it with your advice and re-post it(:

[Mike Smith]

Wow. Really?
Thanks. Lol. I Will re-do it with your advice and re-post it(:

Cool

Hope to see it again soon.....and label the verses/choruses it would be easier to identify them =]

[Calvin's Shadow]

It is important and it's a good song

[Kirsty.com]

Cool

Hope to see it again soon.....and label the verses/choruses it would be easier to identify them =]
Will do, thank you very much :)