Roflcopter

[Mishiesings]

--- ROFLCOPTER ---


Don't be ashamed to balance tact and fashion
Purposeful inactions
Remaining imunne to words
From the critics
Just say something prolific
Make sure it gets enough hits
To make you famous and ambitious
You're lost in your own impotence

Don't extinguish your trend setting habits
Just believe one day you'll have it
And live off of your dumb luck

God forbid, complacence finds the public
We act like we're above it
But our players read, Attack Attack
There's no rational debating
We're addicting to elating ourselves
In fact, in fact

We're running out of things to be addicted too

Don't extinguish your trend setting habits
Just believe one day you'll have it
And live off of your dumb luck

You're predictable, soon invisible

Let's not forget to thank the audience
For their complience
Put down your pen
Make a cover song, it's now a science



[[First time post, opinions please]]

[fishingthe_sky]

A little less Fall Out Boy, a little more originality.

[Meenaghey Aym]

I think as a writer you have to establish a couple things for yourself. Who are you writing for, is a big one. I have written lyrics that mean a brilliant lot to me but they don't make sense bc they are too personal. That is ok but as a writer I have to be prepared that my readers will probably not be able to directly relate. I think that in this day of Fall Out Boy and PanicATD ppl try to make their lyrics more intellectual. That's fine but eitehr do it in a way that it means something to you or do it in a way that a reader can relate. Readability is a big aspect of relating to a writer. I think that this piece is therefore forced. Many intellectual words to beef up its meaning. While excellent vocabulary can accent your work extrememly well, this can also detract from readability and relating to it in general.

If your focus is yourself in this piece then kudos. But I think when an artist is trying to display the beauty of his work he has to be able to take an objective look at it. And trying too hard to beef up a piece intellectually definately detracts in my opinion. I think this is where that comment of "more original" came from. I liked this piece. But it was hard to relate, much less understand your real meaning at 1st read. Now unless you've taken specific fall out boy lyrics and strung em together then i would say it is original.

Maybe forced but still original.

3/5*stars*