New song.

[Clandestine™]

I've been writing this one recently. Tried to go for a Pink Floyd-esque vibe, see what you think. The structure's a bit strange, I know.

Verse 1
I, I, I,
Was baptized in your eyes.
It's like I died
And a new life
Caught mine.

Verse 2

I try, try, and try
To hide my
Intentions
But they shine, shine, shine

Like a strobe light
In a dark night.

I'm feeling like you're always leaving.

Verse 3

Why, why, why
Am I left out to dry?
When I, I, I
Sacrificed my own life
To lie, to lie, to lie

Chorus

In your arms, by your side.
I sigh, sigh, sigh
Arms crossed and eyes closed tight.

I'm feeling like you're always leaving.

[Clandestine™]

bump, please?

[fishingthe_sky]

Repetition is killing this. Pretty bland otherwise.

[Meenaghey Aym]

yea pretty bland... sorry... not much to say about this one. Maybe if you spiced it up musically it could detract from the simplicity of the lyrical content.

[CTMarshall]

Not a fan of the strobe light line at all. Surely, you can think of something better than that.

Other than that, it is pretty simple. It may sound good with music, but it's nothing spectacular without it.