dont sleep with your bestfriends exgirlfriend if she is going to dump you in a month

[TBS0116]

Worst ex and best friends

I'm thinking back to the day that we first met
Covered from our head, to our toes in regret
You couldn't begin to conceive the hatred
that has been building since you left
Do you remember, the day that our lips first grazed
Talk about cliche, awful textbook mistake
To change those decisions
Looking back i'd give anything

(Do you know what you did to me? Do you have a clue how bad it hurts!)
(Do you know what you did to me?) Do you have a guess at what its worth?

I held my breath for you, i wish you'd hold yours for me too
I'm not talking about resting your eyes or falling asleep
(Your just like me but you did this twice!)
(Save me the details!)
I'm not the one who regrets every night
I, may be sleepless, but at least i lye alone
I, may be sleepless, but at least i lye alone

I was so consumed with shooting sunshine in my head
I may have lost a touch of my innocents
Terrible memories become nightmares
And its not to my surprise that i can't forget
Do you remember, the way you said my name
I forgot, I'm sure you say his just the same
When you find your self crying in corners
You will be the only one to blame

(Do you know what you're doing to me? I hate regret like second chances!)
(Do you know what you're doing to me?) You're nothing but a second glance kid

I held my breath for you, i wish you'd hold yours for me too
I'm not talking about resting your eyes or falling asleep
(Your just like me but you did this twice!)
(Save me the details!)
I'm not the one who regrets every night
I, may be sleepless, but at least i lye alone
I, may be sleepless, but at least i lye alone

And this is my promise never to fall in love
And this is my promise to never fall in love
And this is my promise never to fall in love
And this is my promise to never fall in love

And you're next victim?
(Fuck him, Fuck him!)
I could care less about him anyway
You're awful decisions
(Fuck them, Fuck them!)
You never mattered anyway

I held my breath for you, i wish you'd hold yours for me too
(Hold your breath, don't say a word!)
You're just like me but you did this twice
(Your explanation, serves me no purpose!)

[eliselovesmusic]

"Do you remember, the day that our lips first grazed
Talk about cliche, awful textbook mistake"

Pretty cool...

I, may be sleepless, but at least i lye alone

Hmm. This girl is a bitch. I like straight-to-the-point-lines though.

shooting sunshine in my head
the way you said my name
I forgot, I'm sure you say his just the same

I detect a hint of Pete Wentz....

I held my breath for you, i wish you'd hold yours for me too
(Hold your breath, don't say a word!)

I really like this line :-)

Sorry dude I'm kinda zoned out at the moment and waiting to watch American Idol lol but I might give some decent constructive-critisicm another day when I can fully be bothered haha

[TBS0116]

hahah well thank you for replying! pete wentz is actually one of my favorite musicains. i listen to fall out boy near everyday

ps she was a bitch :P

[fishingthe_sky]

I'm thinking back to the day that we first met
Covered from our head, to our toes in regret
No comma necessary. Also, a bit cliche.

You couldn't begin to conceive the hatred
that has been building since you left
Do you remember, the day that our lips first grazed
Talk about cliche, awful textbook mistake
Talking about things being cliche is cliche itself, and is never as witty as it's supposed to be. It's just a way to use excuse using other cliches.

To change those decisions
Looking back i'd give anything

(Do you know what you did to me? Do you have a clue how bad it hurts!)
(Do you know what you did to me?) Do you have a guess at what its worth?
Why the parentheses? and why are these lines so long?


I held my breath for you, i wish you'd hold yours for me too
I'm not talking about resting your eyes or falling asleep
Then what are you talking about? This line lacks context.

(Your just like me but you did this twice!)
(Save me the details!)
I'm not the one who regrets every night
I, may be sleepless, but at least i lye alone
I, may be sleepless, but at least i lye alone
Again, not understanding the point of the parenthesized lines. Also, last two lines, major issues. First, get rid of the commas after "I." Second, it's "lie." You can't make lye the substance a verb, and if that's what you're trying to do, it does not make sense.

I was so consumed with shooting sunshine in my head
I may have lost a touch of my innocents
Innocence?

Terrible memories become nightmares
And its not to my surprise that i can't forget
Do you remember, the way you said my name
I forgot, I'm sure you say his just the same
When you find your self crying in corners
You will be the only one to blame
Egh, you recycled the crying in corners line in the other thing you posted.

(Do you know what you're doing to me? I hate regret like second chances!)
(Do you know what you're doing to me?) You're nothing but a second glance kid

I held my breath for you, i wish you'd hold yours for me too
I'm not talking about resting your eyes or falling asleep
(Your just like me but you did this twice!)
(Save me the details!)
I'm not the one who regrets every night
I, may be sleepless, but at least i lye alone
I, may be sleepless, but at least i lye alone

And this is my promise never to fall in love
And this is my promise to never fall in love
And this is my promise never to fall in love
And this is my promise to never fall in love
The repetition and the little change between them is pretty unaffecting. I don't see the point in writing it out (I take it this is a song), especially since the slight alteration does nothing to change the meaning of the line.

And you're next victim?
(Fuck him, Fuck him!)
I could care less about him anyway
You're awful decisions
(Fuck them, Fuck them!)
You never mattered anyway
It's "your." And I don't believe the last line one bit. It seems totally out of place, because clearly she does matter. It's not a convincing line.

I held my breath for you, i wish you'd hold yours for me too
(Hold your breath, don't say a word!)
You're just like me but you did this twice
(Your explanation, serves me no purpose!)
Again, no comma in the last line, and again, parentheses?

[bootsydan]

Lol, good title

[as_we_learn]

haha the title was def short and to the point ;]

[eliselovesmusic]

hahah well thank you for replying! pete wentz is actually one of my favorite musicains. i listen to fall out boy near everyday





Oh hell yes

[TBS0116]

I'm thinking back to the day that we first met
Covered from our head, to our toes in regret
No comma necessary. Also, a bit cliche.

You couldn't begin to conceive the hatred
that has been building since you left
Do you remember, the day that our lips first grazed
Talk about cliche, awful textbook mistake
Talking about things being cliche is cliche itself, and is never as witty as it's supposed to be. It's just a way to use excuse using other cliches.

To change those decisions
Looking back i'd give anything

(Do you know what you did to me? Do you have a clue how bad it hurts!)
(Do you know what you did to me?) Do you have a guess at what its worth?
Why the parentheses? and why are these lines so long?


I held my breath for you, i wish you'd hold yours for me too
I'm not talking about resting your eyes or falling asleep
Then what are you talking about? This line lacks context.

(Your just like me but you did this twice!)
(Save me the details!)
I'm not the one who regrets every night
I, may be sleepless, but at least i lye alone
I, may be sleepless, but at least i lye alone
Again, not understanding the point of the parenthesized lines. Also, last two lines, major issues. First, get rid of the commas after "I." Second, it's "lie." You can't make lye the substance a verb, and if that's what you're trying to do, it does not make sense.

I was so consumed with shooting sunshine in my head
I may have lost a touch of my innocents
Innocence?

Terrible memories become nightmares
And its not to my surprise that i can't forget
Do you remember, the way you said my name
I forgot, I'm sure you say his just the same
When you find your self crying in corners
You will be the only one to blame
Egh, you recycled the crying in corners line in the other thing you posted.

(Do you know what you're doing to me? I hate regret like second chances!)
(Do you know what you're doing to me?) You're nothing but a second glance kid

I held my breath for you, i wish you'd hold yours for me too
I'm not talking about resting your eyes or falling asleep
(Your just like me but you did this twice!)
(Save me the details!)
I'm not the one who regrets every night
I, may be sleepless, but at least i lye alone
I, may be sleepless, but at least i lye alone

And this is my promise never to fall in love
And this is my promise to never fall in love
And this is my promise never to fall in love
And this is my promise to never fall in love
The repetition and the little change between them is pretty unaffecting. I don't see the point in writing it out (I take it this is a song), especially since the slight alteration does nothing to change the meaning of the line.

And you're next victim?
(Fuck him, Fuck him!)
I could care less about him anyway
You're awful decisions
(Fuck them, Fuck them!)
You never mattered anyway
It's "your." And I don't believe the last line one bit. It seems totally out of place, because clearly she does matter. It's not a convincing line.

I held my breath for you, i wish you'd hold yours for me too
(Hold your breath, don't say a word!)
You're just like me but you did this twice
(Your explanation, serves me no purpose!)
Again, no comma in the last line, and again, parentheses?


first, covered from head to toes in regret. me and this girl were having sex and we shouldn't have been. hence the thread title

second these are song lyrics. i use commas to remind myself where to pause briefly while reading, and i use parenthesis to show a different person singing, but thats my bust.. i was vague.

third, it was cliche.. what happened between me and her. thats why i used the word. you can't really say don't use the word because you don't know what happened with her and i.

four, good catch on the spelling errors. I'm awful at spelling and grammar.

five, i messed up while writing it, it was suppose to be the same, didn't feel like changing it honestly, because yeah, they mean the same thing.

six, funny story she doesn't matter, because the intention originally of "her and i" was to have sex and end it. then we kept having sex. so we decided to date. it didn't work out, because in all reality, we only wanted to have sex. so she doesn't matter.

[TBS0116]

and the recycling thing, was done on purpose, their about the same girl if I'm not mistaken. i guess it was my owm way of putting emphasis on that subject because she was, crying in a corner.

[TBS0116]

Oh hell yes


ps american idol is gay ;)