dead men....

[a speedo model]

"Dead Men Will Tell Their Tails"

as i've grown up it's gotten harder to live
or have i just lost my touch?
and these are things i must live with
my conscience, my self-doubt
there's a voice inside and it's calling out
and i don't know how
but there's got to be a way out
cause i feel so useless right now

[chorus]
holding on always made me feel
like i at least had something
even though it was never real
it was better then nothing

and as i've sown up these old wounds
it's gotten easier to live
or have i just learned to bare through?
your conscience, your excuse
there's a sun behind the sky
and it's starting to shine through
i'm blinded, reminded of who
i told myself i'd never turn into

[repeat chorus]
tonight
my lungs close, and i breathe in gasps
tonight
i turned around to follow your path
and i felt alive
felt the weight lift
from my eyes
i felt the pain shift
as you took it all away
i am alive today!!

[de la sympathie]

some of the lines are okay. it was kind of choppy in my opinion, and the word -out- is very repetitive. it's alright though, just needs a bit of work.

[a speedo model]

thanks, i'll work on it.

[para ser libre]

in adn out of

a
b
a
b

to

a
A
b
b

and back to no shceme oyu need ot fix that, or it makes not sense and loos like you failed at trying to use the scheme