what summer did to us

[brandnew_islove]

i know its not that good but feedback please?

So this is how it feels
To remember all those late nights.
We spent talking on the phone.
About music.
And death.
And religion.
Before we realized what it meant.
To live.
And to know the difference between.
Love and hate.
Those times we spent out back.
Blowing bubbles.
Trying to decide where young became old.
And right became wrong.
Ripping out pages from our favorite books.
From our own notebooks.
Proclaiming sun showers cute.
And the eighties overrated.
Cutters as conceded.
Love the next big thing.
Spending hours making mix tapes.
Perfect with The Smiths.
And too much Elvis Costello.
Summer has turned us into emotions.

[punkysmurf]

it's good except for the last line, and the sun showers line. I know this poem is for you, and so I respect the inside references to the events you had, but you shared it here so I'll say that your references should mean something. The line from in the Saves the Day song, "Say, "Chris look out across the sky and tell me which way the wind blows." was a reference that had meaning, because it added to the imagery and lyrical flow of the song. Make sure your refernces do that. Seriously, good stuff though.