My Pain

[Mike Smith]

What do you guys think? I put a lot of time into writing this, it's kind of darker, but i think its a better quality song then what i have posted on here before..

But constructive criticism is always welcome

Verse 1:

I hope you never have to suffer
Like the way i do
You don't even realize
How much your life should mean to you

Chorus:

Your pain is just a joke
Against what i have to feel
Your greatest fear is some illusion
To me my fear is real

Verse 2:

I cry for help
But no one seems to hear
No ones close enough to see me
When i thought they all were near

Chorus:

Your pain is just a joke
Against what i have to feel
Your greatest fear is an illusion
To me, my fear is real

Bridge:

I cant see the light
I gave up looking for the sun
Cause a miracle should come along
Before i find it again

Chorus:

Your pain is just a joke
Against what i have to feel
Your greatest fear is an illusion
To me, my fear is real

[Laural666]

I write songs myself;; and i think you should put more stuff