Not An Ordinary Day

[vaters]

I finished these lyrics today and ive asked a lot of people how they sound, but no one can seem to find the meaning so i want to know if you can find a meaning or if they are just bad

Not an Ordinary Day

Just an ordinary day
Just another simple day
I survived the night once again
I rose from my sleep, thinking just another day

Guess it was something
Something not so simple
It would change my life forever
Who knew one thing could do so much
It was something I never had before
And something I probably never will

It was the day I fell in
Fell in the hole, the hole that takes you away
From the simple life you have
To something so much different, something so right
It was something you couldn’t fight

The second you realise it
Everything changes, for the better
An amazing feeling
But there was one problem; I was in the hole alone
I fell and there was no one to hold me up
No one was there, no one cared

It was the day I fell in
Fell in the hole, the hole that takes you away
From the simple life you have
To something so much different, something so right
It was something you couldn’t fight

It was all in my imagination
To think someone actually cared
To think someone was actually there
Cause no one ever dared
No one ever looked my way
Or asked what was wrong
Then I met you

It was the day I fell in
Fell in the hole, the hole that takes you away
From the simple life you have
To something so much different, something so right
It was something you couldn’t fight

To actually believe what I believed
I must have been crazy
To think something so amazing could happen to me
I like to think maybe someday
But I’m just lying to myself
And its time I told the truth

[eliselovesmusic]

I like the last verse. As for finding a meaning: uhm.... the chorus makes me think it's about sex but I'm probably just really twisted haha...


I think the reason people aren't finding meaning is because it is just too ambigous. I actually don't mind this so much because I like to relate lyrics back to a personal experience rather than picking it apart at the seams.

If you specifically want people to pick up on a meaning, I would put in a more specific line relating directly to your experience or whatever... But yeah that's just my opinion :-)

[vaters]

Its about falling inlove alone moreless, its about me falling for someone and the other person not loving me back, and they lied to me about it saying that they did, but this song isnt really about the lying more about just falling inlove alone

The way i refer to the "Hole" is my way of refering to love, "falling in the hole" meaning "falling inlove"

[vaters]

Okay so ive revised my lyrics to fit more of a specific meaning here they are

Not an Ordinary Day

Just an ordinary day
Just another simple day
I survived the night once again
I rose from my sleep, thinking just another day

Guess it was something
Something not so simple
It would change my life forever
Who knew one thing could do so much
It was something I never had before
And something I probably never will

It was the day I fell in love
Fell in the hole of love, the hole that takes you away
From the simple life you have
To something so much different, something so right
It was something you couldn’t fight

The second you realise it
Everything changes, for the better
An amazing feeling
But there was one problem; I was in the hole alone
I fell and there was no one to hold me up
No one was there, no one cared

Guess it was something
Something not so simple
It would change my life forever
Who knew one thing could do so much
It was something I never had before
And something I probably never will

It was all in my imagination
To think someone actually cared
To think someone was actually there
Cause no one ever dared
No one ever looked my way
Or asked what was wrong
Then I met you

Guess it was something
Something not so simple
It would change my life forever
Who knew one thing could do so much
It was something I never had before
And something I probably never will

To actually believe what I believed
I must have been crazy
To think something so amazing could happen to me
I like to think maybe someday
But I’m just lying to myself
And its time I told the truth

[eliselovesmusic]

Yeah the revised version is better - you definitley get the meaning across better... But now it kinda feels a bit cliche...

I would say something like "It was the day I fell into your abyss" or something random like that haha

The subject of the poem (falling in love alone) is definitley worth a song though. Keep up the writing dude :-)

[fishingthe_sky]

Just an ordinary day
Just another simple day
I survived the night once again
I rose from my sleep, thinking just another day
OK, this already puts this off on the wrong foot. Using "day" to rhyme three times demonstrates a very strong lack of creativity, and makes your piece start off on a really childish sounding note. Plus, you're basically recycling this "ordinary day" thing 3 times. The changes in language don't change the meaning of what you're saying, so it just sounds redundant.

Guess it was something
Something not so simple
It would change my life forever
Who knew one thing could do so much
It was something I never had before
And something I probably never will
Words like "something" and "one thing" are vague and weak-sounding. Address the thing! There are countless things in the universe, and you can use one thing to talk about another thing, thereby making the thing you actually want to talk about an interesting thing, because you're changing the way people look at things (metaphors/figurative language). Most of the time, something is the worst kind of thing that can stand in a thing's place, when the thing should be spoken about as a thing, not just "some" thing.

It was the day I fell in love
Fell in the hole of love, the hole that takes you away
From the simple life you have
To something so much different, something so right
It was something you couldn’t fight
You waver back and forth between having a rhyme scheme and not having a rhyme scheme, and makes this seem uneven and not well-planned. I'm not saying you have to stick to the same rhyme scheme, but moving from having rhymes to not having rhymes in a piece like this doesn't create a good sense of balance. Again, the somethings aren't helping, though here they are more justified. I'm also not feeling "hole of love." It's kind of an awkward image to make of love, and while it kind of makes sense, I think there are stronger ways to convey the image of a "hole". Honestly, I still think sex (as was commented on before).

The second you realise it
Everything changes, for the better
An amazing feeling
But there was one problem; I was in the hole alone
I fell and there was no one to hold me up
No one was there, no one cared
Phrases like "an amazing feeling" are rather weak and a bit like stating the obvious. Even saying "I feel amazing" is stronger than what you have here; at least you're personalizing it, not just making a statement about it. But amazing really is an overused word that doesn't carry a whole lot of weight or meaning. Also, the last three lines read like a children's book, not song lyrics.

Guess it was something
Something not so simple
It would change my life forever
Who knew one thing could do so much
It was something I never had before
And something I probably never will

It was all in my imagination
To think someone actually cared
To think someone was actually there
Cause no one ever dared
No one ever looked my way
Or asked what was wrong
Then I met you
I don't get the last line. Isn't the "you" the whole cause of this? and now the "you" is the savior? If you're going to make this about how this person didn't love you back, making a line about how they came in and cared doesn't really make sense. You don't start with it and lead with the dissolution of what you thought was going on, and you don't set this up against anything else. Right now, this bit just doesn't belong here.

Guess it was something
Something not so simple
It would change my life forever
Who knew one thing could do so much
It was something I never had before
And something I probably never will

To actually believe what I believed
I must have been crazy
To think something so amazing could happen to me
I like to think maybe someday
But I’m just lying to myself
And its time I told the truth
Last two lines of this are the meat of this piece, and while I'm glad we got here.

This reads more diary-like than song-like. The language is too prose-ish, and it lacks a lot of elements like a set rhyme scheme or rhythm that would make it seem like a song. You also use really flat and vague phrases and words that don't bring out any real emotion. Put some heart into it, man. Don't explain how love feels, don't describe the scene or your feelings, say what you want to say! You're hurt, make us believe you're hurt!.