Anti-everything--first draft

[NobodysSlave]

Fuck your government, Fuck your judgment

Bring on the anarchy, Fuck christianity
Bring on the violence, Fuck your fucking silence
All you people say you hate the way shit's going down
But in the end all you do is sit around, you just sit around
You pussies say you want to help and save the little kids
And then you cry when infants die and blame it on the SIDs
Don't be surprised when your god dies and you all go to hell
Because your idea of good shit and charity just isn't going to sell
Everything you do is all for you it's all for you
You've got your life planned, through and through,
No loopholes nothing new, absolutely nothing new for you
Because you know what's best, you always have, always will
And as for perfect: only you could ever fit the bill
We bow down and worship nothing just so we can say we love,
And when seomthing good hapapens, well hell it came from above,
And when something's fucked up its all man's fault
All our sins in all our vaults,
You all lie and you all will die
SO SHUT THE FUCK UP!!!
This is my time, my song, my words, my thought
I don't give a shit about who you've all fought,
I say you live, i say you die, i say jump you say how high,
Everything you do is wrong, Everything you say...
But now sit down, open your mind, hear what i've got to say:
Fuck your judgement, fuck your government,
Bring on the anarchy, fuck christianity,
Bring on the violence, fuck your fucking silence.
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yea first draft and i kno it's not flowing perfectly...
but help me out, will ya? buddha knows the song needs help :redface:

[outofkilter]

Heh, it made me laugh a little, because it's all "RARR ARGH FIGHT THE POWER MAAAAN!!11oneshift!"
But that's probably what you wanted ot get across. If so, good work.

[NobodysSlave]

haha, yea i kno it's a little loud, but o well it's not supposed to be fuckin emo, u kno?

[outofkilter]

What does it have to do with Rites of Spring? ;)

[Blared]

I read this like it was a rap...anyone else?

[NobodysSlave]

nuthin :-(

[apoemtothedead]

I HATE SOCIETY!!!!

[Elijscott]

To be honest, I understood that you were angry.. but that is all.

You denounce religion, government, and tell everyone to open their mind and listen to you. But then you don't really say anything. Just telling people that your opinion is that they're wrong really doesn't accomplish that much (to me).

I guess a little less condemnation and a little more clarification would make it more relatable to me. I liked the passion, though.

[a speedo model]

it was alright.