Glass

[x1onexwo1fx]

Put this in the needle
Inject it through my veins
Let me taste euphoria
So I won’t go insane

This sudden sense of blissfulness is
All I ever really need
For me to get through this boring life
Your pure substance is my speed

You are the air I breathe
Don’t let this poison me
You are all that I need
You make me feel complete

I know that this will screw me later
But I need this feeling now
I need to feel like I’m in the sky
Before I go crashing down

You are the air I breathe
Don’t let this poison me
You are all that I need
You make me feel complete

You make me feel complete

And I know that this won’t be here in the morning
But I don’t care
I need this now
This sudden sense of blissfulness is

You are the air I breathe
Don’t let this poison me
You are all that I need
You make me feel complete

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It's about a year old. As always, any sort of feedback would be nice. However, I'm not really looking for advice on how to make it better. Just thought I'd share it since I wrote the music to it only a couple weeks ago. I'm planning on getting my band together over summer. Since I only have a rough idea of the vocal melody so far, the lyrics are bound to change anyway. I intended for it to be rather ambiguous, so I'm interested in your interpretations of it.

[eliselovesmusic]

Yeah well it's definitley ambiguous in the way that you don't specify what or who is "the air (you) breathe."
I gotta say I like it for it's ambiguity though :-)

Personally I like the first two verses the most. I don't know why but yeah haha

What I got was that you're either talking about drugs, a girl, or sex but those are the themes that you expect it to be about - I can't really give it an original meaning.

[fishingthe_sky]

First two verses are the best ones. Not really original or fresh-sounding, but pull the most weight language wise. I don't like how heavy you lay on the consonance in "This sudden sense of blissfulness is." The chorus is cliche through and through. As you're not really looking for full on critiques, though, I'll stop there.

You're playing around with the whole drug/love/sex thing, ala Northstar.

[Timma]

Personally, I liked it. Not sure the sound you were going for but I got the interpretation of Blue October meets Alkaline Trio. I like those bands. My only suggestion is for song format. The portion of song where you singled out, "You make me feel complete," I would repeat. Not a ton, just a couple of times to set the mood. Maybe have it fading before coming onto the downslope of the song. Good Job.

[newtothis]

First two verses are the best ones. Not really original or fresh-sounding, but pull the most weight language wise. I don't like how heavy you lay on the consonance in "This sudden sense of blissfulness is." The chorus is cliche through and through. As you're not really looking for full on critiques, though, I'll stop there.

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I agree about the chorus. "You complete me" is something that, I think, I at least, am tired of hearing. Nothing personal.