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[sheepfire454]

this is what happens when you write down a freestyle rap haha =D

spark up anova spliff, turn the lights down low
i don't no were this is goin, i'm just followin the flow
am i gonna rap bout gangstas, guns drugs or ho's?
situation on telelivision or just talk in prose
hope my inspiration will come and my nerves will go
so just sit back relax and enjoy the show

enlightenment is the only goal on this quest
closed minds, closed hearts, only leads to stress
now your lookin at me like 'how come you no best?'
but i been there, i done it and now im retaking the test
so sit down, shut up and put that big man talk to rest
cos i no to you im just your everyday labourer
but lyricaly im gonna be your saviour
make you slow things down, maybe start to think twice
bout how this world could use an ickle more nice
but with earthquakes below and grey clouds above
who on this planet got time 4 love?


criticism//advice?

[eliselovesmusic]

but with earthquakes below and grey clouds above
who on this planet got time 4 love?

Great lines. Love it.

The rest was nothing special... The spelling/grammar errors are killing me man.

[fishingthe_sky]

Well, if it's a freestyle rap, there's not much to say, since it's supposed to be pliable and loose. To comment on its parts would be to say they are to remain constant, which is not the case, unless you're trying to take a freestyle and make it an actual song.