Guess Who

[Hilikus]

kind of a folky feel, i dont really think it seems to great without you being able to hear the vocal melody and stuff but tell me what you think



Did you ever wonder, what’s going on in those houses with their lights on
When you ride your bike, in the middle of the night and see those yellow windows
As a mother scolds her children she says “I’m about to explode”
“I’ve been letting you do what you want to do, I think its time I put my foot down”
And she put it down, oh yes she put it down

This is my garden, I want you to know
You’re helping it grow

On the corner of two streets a woman stops to call her husband from a phone booth
“Darling, I got out of work late, I won’t have dinner done by the time you get home”
He yelled and he carried one, what would she do, oh what would she do?
She yelled “I’ve had enough of your shit, I’m leaving you”
And she left, oh yeah she left

This is my garden, I want you to know
You’re helping it grow

Well each of you are a flower, each of you are a seed
And each of them is a weed that you’re slowly weeding out
I hope they don’t come back and ruin your reputation
I hope they don’t come back and ruin your condition

Well each of you are a flower, each of you are a seed
And each of them is a weed that you’re slowly weeding out

[de la sympathie]

actually, i really like this. it tells a great story.

[yaz]

i like it...cuz you sed it had a folky feel, im gettin a dolly parton tune in the background, it would be great if you had some audio, but it tells a story, i really like it.

[Boring Pop Song]

creative. maybe the best thing i've read on the poetry boards so far

[Hilikus]

thanks alot to all of you, i might have an audio up shortly. The song is going to be done with one of my female friends also on vocals (doing the female dialogue) so i have to see when its best for her.

[ArTkY_]

:appl:

Amazing. Hands down one of the best things ever written on these boards.