Courage

[Mike Smith]

I'm not sure why i wrote it, but it's about a soldier in the Iraq War who fought hard, but injured and had to go home. Constructive criticism please?

Courage:

So many explosions light up the sky
Im in a ditch with soldiers
Some dead, some still alive
I try to hide as another bomb hits
The earth shaking from the treacherous hits

My mind starts to race, then it's my heart
From what I see this could be the end
Or it could just be the start
Of something crazy happening to me
Something inside, that others can't see

Again i feel the earth shake
Glass and metal flying high
It hits my jacket, and I let out a cry
Please give me the courage
Release me of my fear
But despite a great effort,
No one can seem to hear

I went on to battle that day
But after that things faded
I had to go home,
Injured, tired and hungry
Unfortunately for me
My battle was finally over

I learned something that day,
About who I was
From the way man acts,
To the things he does
I learned that the outcome,
Of the battles we fight
Is determined by courage,
Not just by our might.

[The Personist]

Cliche. This is not interesting. You should try to write things that don't rely on old, rehashed images. Your writing is painfully stagnant.