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Forum: Share Your Lyrics and Poetry
11/19/09, 10:11 AM
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Replies: 3
Views: 418
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Forum: Share Your Lyrics and Poetry
11/14/09, 07:52 AM
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Replies: 3
Views: 418
Where the Wild Thing Is
Enfolded by the shower sheets of drops
Of lemon juice and sparkling wines; and tarts
Whose scent covers my head and clothes my toes
With cherry shoes and crescent socks. I spin,
My effervescence...
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Forum: Share Your Lyrics and Poetry
10/22/09, 07:57 PM
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Replies: 1
Views: 353
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Forum: Share Your Lyrics and Poetry
10/21/09, 03:58 PM
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Replies: 1
Views: 353
The Sidewalk Crack
The Lilac in the sidewalk crack;
The Ivy on deserted hut;
The dusty marks on pre-stained glass,
All road marks of this wandering.
The Monster in the dead pan mead,
My Grendel tearing...
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Forum: Share Your Lyrics and Poetry
10/17/09, 06:04 PM
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Replies: 1
Views: 352
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Forum: Share Your Lyrics and Poetry
10/17/09, 06:02 PM
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Replies: 1
Views: 352
Dandelion
A weed for all intents and purposes;
She presses; Inching along the wall,
A crown to the unadorned skull
Of my grandmother's flower garden.
Enchanted by the way she moves, astonished,
She dances ...
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Forum: Share Your Lyrics and Poetry
09/13/09, 05:54 AM
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Replies: 2
Views: 421
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Forum: Share Your Lyrics and Poetry
09/08/09, 04:49 PM
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Replies: 2
Views: 421
Nameless
Nameless
Is the state of being that dominates;
Wherein, I wander.
Perhaps I see or maybe knowing
Reliance upon my wishing star,
O’ that I’d never believed in dreams
That looked so...
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Forum: Share Your Lyrics and Poetry
08/19/09, 10:03 PM
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Replies: 2
Views: 316
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Forum: Share Your Lyrics and Poetry
08/19/09, 09:57 PM
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Replies: 0
Views: 229
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Forum: Share Your Lyrics and Poetry
08/08/09, 07:37 PM
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Replies: 11
Views: 546
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Forum: Share Your Lyrics and Poetry
08/08/09, 07:33 PM
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Replies: 11
Views: 546
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Forum: Share Your Lyrics and Poetry
08/01/09, 08:15 PM
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Replies: 5
Views: 365
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Forum: Share Your Lyrics and Poetry
08/01/09, 07:54 PM
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Replies: 5
Views: 365
This seems like chopped up prose to me. I mean,...
This seems like chopped up prose to me. I mean, your enjambment has no real significance, and nothing is really going on here. You sound very indecisive as well, as if you don't know quite what you...
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Forum: Share Your Lyrics and Poetry
08/01/09, 07:28 PM
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Replies: 11
Views: 546
Ha. No apologizing. I will say what I have is...
Ha. No apologizing. I will say what I have is better than a lot that is posted here. It IS an ego booster. haha. Even if razor boy has critiqued some, I would still appreciate your feedback. This may...
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Forum: Share Your Lyrics and Poetry
08/01/09, 07:15 PM
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Replies: 11
Views: 546
Thanks. I'm going to be out of town for a week...
Thanks. I'm going to be out of town for a week starting tomorrow, but I appreciate it. Just warning you, I think only a few of my older pieces on this site are acceptable and even remotely good. My...
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Forum: Share Your Lyrics and Poetry
08/01/09, 07:12 PM
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Replies: 8
Views: 519
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Forum: Share Your Lyrics and Poetry
08/01/09, 07:02 PM
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Replies: 8
Views: 519
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Forum: Share Your Lyrics and Poetry
08/01/09, 06:36 PM
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Replies: 1
Views: 288
Ok, here are a few of my thoughts:
1.Why would...
Ok, here are a few of my thoughts:
1.Why would her wounded heart take a risk for someone that wounded her?
2. Don't write in the song that the lyrics are cliche. That is just admitting to all your...
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Forum: Share Your Lyrics and Poetry
08/01/09, 06:27 PM
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Replies: 11
Views: 546
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Forum: Share Your Lyrics and Poetry
07/31/09, 08:00 PM
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Replies: 11
Views: 546
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Forum: Share Your Lyrics and Poetry
07/31/09, 08:38 AM
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Replies: 11
Views: 454
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Forum: Share Your Lyrics and Poetry
07/30/09, 07:35 PM
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Replies: 11
Views: 546
Pie
Hi everyone. I know I haven't posted in forever. There has been a lot going on with me. So... here you go.
Yesterday I was my grandmother’s blueberry banana crème pie:
A frothy mix of...
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Forum: Share Your Lyrics and Poetry
07/30/09, 03:22 PM
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Replies: 11
Views: 454
Hi. So I'm not fishing or David and I haven't...
Hi. So I'm not fishing or David and I haven't posted in forever, but I'll comment. :)
I like this piece. Especially the apostrophe (sunshine). The image was very strong. I was wondering though,...
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Forum: Personal Life
07/14/09, 05:35 PM
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Replies: 1,875
Views: 136,941
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